Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A Information in any globe across any industries or domain are useful for sure, Specially for those , who doing research in science or in academic work. It is useful in Businesses as well. How anyone wants to share information about their domain is a individuals choice and at which extents they are comfortable to share is also solely choice.

I personally thinks, if i was in research domain i would loved to share all important or non important , less or much valuable information among to my classmates. I am seeing this as beneficial as when we discuss anything we got new ideas and understand others mindset or challenges they already faced or resolved, which saves my times if i am doing same mistake or stuck somewhere in similar problems. At same time i do agree we don't want to share unrelated information. For example, I am doing research on Data Partition techniques so, anything related to partition techniques such as questions or doubts or suggestions can be discuss among mentors, classmates or in group discussion. Opposite of this , if i am bringing current news or an Importance of security awareness to the conversations which is not valuable to current context . Same things are applicable to Businesses as well. We can discuss strategies of our product launch within our company, we should not share any information to other companies. We definitely can get feedbacks from other which helps us to improve our product we can't revel ingredients of it .

Every coin as two side, simillary sharing informations has its on. For example, if a shared everything related to my research there might be chance to stolen. Someone else can publish my idea as theirs. Same with my business strategies , If other company is running campaigns on simillar products , they can copy my strategy on it and get benefits from that before i can execute it.

At the end , concluding my point of view in both beliefs. If you feel sharing informations brings some positive impact on your projects then only shares but if you are seeing that it will ruined your products i would like to avoid sharing too much informations, instead i would prefer to give only high level informations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention research and business, the arguments regarding the risks of sharing (e.g., 'stolen' ideas) are a bit repetitive and lack depth. The conclusion is clear, but the overall structure of the argument could be more sophisticated. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more nuanced reasoning rather than just stating the obvious benefits or risks.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Every coin as two side, simillary sharing informations has its on' is a clunky attempt at a transition. There are also issues with referencing and logical flow between sentences, such as the abrupt shift from the research example to the business example. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the flow of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'in any globe across any industries' and 'revel ingredients'. The repetition of basic words like 'information' and 'share' limits the range. To improve, you should aim to use more academic collocations and synonyms to express your ideas more precisely. The spelling errors, such as 'simillary' and 'revel' (instead of reveal), also detract from the overall quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Information... are useful', 'I personally thinks'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which makes the text difficult to read. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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