Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

by having a cursory glance. it is evident that, some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world.

so from my point of view it is good to share much information as possible. by sharing much information as possible it will be good for every field. by having much information it will be easy to deal with any problem and also good for development of the industry.

on the other hand, some people believe that some information is to important and to valuable to be shared freely. From my point of view is is true that some information are valuable to be shared freely because if we spread important information freely so anybody can abuse of it anyone can use the information for a bad intention. so in extent of it we can not share valuable information freely

in conclusion, both of the topic is true and I agree with the both point of view

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits the development of ideas. While you mention both sides of the argument, the points are repetitive and lack specific examples or depth. For instance, you mention that information could be 'abused' but do not provide a concrete example of how this might happen in a business or scientific context. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with supporting evidence and ensure you meet the word count to allow for a full discussion of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are mechanical and repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'by having' and 'some people believe'. The conclusion is also very brief and does not effectively synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that logically follows the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'good to share' and 'much information' are used repeatedly, which restricts the range of expression. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'abuse of it' (should be 'abuse it') and 'in extent of it' (which is not a standard English phrase). To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and avoid repeating the same basic words throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'some information are valuable' (subject-verb agreement error), 'to important and to valuable' (incorrect use of 'to' instead of 'too'), and punctuation issues such as starting sentences with lowercase letters. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, correct usage of 'too' vs 'to', and incorporating a wider variety of complex sentence structures.

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