Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people argue with that that it is excellent step to give much and more information quickly in field of scientific research, business and in academic world. while other argue with that that some information is crucial to shared it freely without fear.

overall, sharing information Fastly in scientific research, in business and in academic is crucial because it helps the scientists in some research's and also helpful for employer and also beneficial for learner.

On the one hand, sharing information in scientific world and in business and in academic field quickly is beneficial for scientists, employers and also for learner. For example, if a person has information about the solution of some problems faced by scientists. sometimes scientists struct in something, if someone has solution for that difficulty so they should give that solution to scientists. the reason behind it that that are struggling to invent something which is helpful for us. but so sad for that that they demand for money for giving the solution or giving information.

On the other hand, sharing information freely is beneficial for everyone either it is in scientific work or in business or for learner. because if someone has information about or idea about boosting of employment or helpful for learners. For example, if you give a positive idea to every field of knowledge and it bring a huge positive change in it, it also improves the country status.

In conclusion, sharing information freely is crucial for every field of employment it is. share positive information which is helpful for everyone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is limited. While you mention the benefits of sharing information for scientists and learners, the arguments are repetitive and lack specific, well-developed examples. For instance, the example about scientists 'struct in something' is vague and does not clearly illustrate the tension between open access and proprietary value. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, ensure each body paragraph explores a distinct idea with a concrete, real-world example, and maintain a consistent position throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and also' and 'for example'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow. For example, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'conversely') and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'good', 'helpful', and 'information'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'sharing information Fastly' and 'scientists struct in something'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To improve, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and collocations. Expanding your range of synonyms and learning how to use them in the correct context will significantly enhance your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies mostly on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('some research's'), article usage ('in field of'), and sentence fragments ('but so sad for that that they demand for money'). These errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to grasp. To improve, you need to practice constructing more complex sentences using subordinate clauses and ensure you proofread for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb tenses and prepositions. Focusing on sentence variety will also help you demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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