Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people believing that some thought to be positive by sharing thoughts and few have view in sharing openly. There is a widespread worry that it will lead to myriads of concerns in one's life.

There are number of arguments in favor of my stance the most one is the research. Let us understand with the help of example as per certain evidence and research importance of sharing knowledge is very valuable point covering all types. Real life practical scenario there was a tech audit schedule for insurance industry as per IRDA tech guidelines. And authorized person starts investigating check all the structures of website which was being used already to cover day to day productive work. While doing this he came across 1 module which was already build by development team, but no one was aware about that, and work was carried out manually and time consuming. This clearly proves it is always good practice to spread all details.

Secondly, moving on to the second part of the statement this will be covered by giving small example will real time coffee shop in that there are varieties of drinks recipes present in the kitchen of the shop so if new sheaf joins he can refer all quantities what should be put in order to prepare as per order he received from customer that proves the importance of any sort of information in the academic world.

Conclusion, I am in the favor of both formal and informal parts mention above and clearly explained with reference example.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is significantly underdeveloped. The introduction is confusing and fails to clearly outline the two opposing views. The examples provided, such as the tech audit and the coffee shop, are anecdotal and lack the depth required for an academic essay. The prompt asks for a discussion on scientific research, business, and the academic world, but the response focuses on narrow, specific scenarios that do not fully explore the broader implications of information sharing versus confidentiality. The conclusion is abrupt and does not clearly state your own opinion as requested by the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions between ideas are often missing or mechanical, such as 'Secondly, moving on to the second part'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. For instance, the transition from the tech audit example to the conclusion is abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which hinders the flow of the text. Better use of linking words and clearer topic sentences would significantly improve the structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. While there is an attempt to use more sophisticated language like 'conspicuous' and 'colossal', these are often used in contexts that feel unnatural or slightly inaccurate. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'no one was aware about that' instead of 'aware of' and 'new sheaf' instead of 'new chef'. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'There are number of arguments' (missing article), 'authorized person starts investigating check' (incorrect verb form), and 'I am in the favor of' (incorrect preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.

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