Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Mostly possible information can be shared amoung the people and some people believe on it and on other side some type of information is more valuable and can not share freely.
Some people belive that the information should be share among the people that is nessasry for them. They think that from this informtion they perform good in their business and better performance in research. From our paractical life, our teachers share important information between students and teach them everything freely. The good information is shared between people as possible i scientific research, business and the academic world. On the other hand, some people believe that some information is more valuable and important information can not share freely. We see in our paracticle life, some types of course on the socail media is paid. If we buy there premium subscription than we see the vedio that is paid on social pages. They think that is the source of earning and can not share valuable information freely.
In my conclusion, infromation should be share amoung people and some people think that sharing information is source of income and can not share valuable information freely.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 193 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is significantly restricted. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument, the discussion is superficial and lacks the depth required for an Academic Task 2 essay. The position is not clearly articulated or sustained throughout the response. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and specific, relevant examples, ensuring that each paragraph contributes meaningfully to the overall discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are mechanical and often repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, making the flow of the argument feel disjointed. For instance, the transition 'On the other hand' is used, but the connection between the sentences within paragraphs is weak. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that logically leads to the next point.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'amoung', 'nessasry', 'paractical', and 'socail'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, make the writing feel simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your vocabulary to include more precise, topic-specific terms related to research, business, and intellectual property, and pay closer attention to accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'information should be share'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'can not share freely' instead of 'cannot be shared freely'), and sentence structure. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, you need to practice using a variety of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses and conditional sentences, while focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with passive voice and verb tenses.
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