Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
ACCORDING TO THIS ESSAY I BELIEVE THAT SOME INFORMATION ARE RELATED TO SO MUCH IMPORTANT FOR THE NATION OR FOR THE INSTITUTE AND SOME INFORMATION ARE SUCH HUGE TO SAY IN OPEN BECAUSE THAT INFORMATION RELATED TO PEOPLE OR EITHER POSSIBLE FOR THE STUDENTS SO ABOUT THAT ALL THE THINGS WHICH ARE GIVEN HERE I DISCUSS IN BELOW PARAGRAPH.
TO SAY IN THE DAYS SOME INFORMATION REALTED TO STUDY SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH AND BUSINESS ARE SUCH A HUGE AND SO MUCH IMPORTANT TO THAT COUNTRY SO THAT TIME THE INFORMATION ABOUT THAT ARE ONLY TOLD AND DISCUSS IN THE PRIVATE PLACE IN THE PERSONAL FACE TO FACE BASIS BECAUSE IF WE LEAK THAT INFORMATION SOME THING HAPPEN TO US OR SOMETHING TO OUR COUNTRY AND ALSO IT CREATE A BIG HUGE PROBLEM TO US OR OUR FAMILY BECAUSE SOME TERORIRTS OR SOMETHING ELSE THEY ABOUT THIS INFORMATION THEY EVEN TRY TO KILL OUR WHOLE FAMILY FOR THAT SO I BELEVIE THAT INFORMATION RALATING TO THIS ARE ONLU TALK IN THE RIGHT WAY OR WITH THE RIGHT PERSON.
TO OTHER HAND SOME INFORMATION LIKE FOR THE EDUCATION FOR THE BUSINESS ARE SUCH REALLY HELP THE PEOPLE ARE USED TO SAY IN THE BASIS OF INTERNETOR ADVERTISNMNET OR THE POSTER OR THE PAMPLET OR SOMTHING ELSE THIS KIND OF THINGS ARE REALLY HELP FOR THE PEOPLE SO THATS IT TO THIS POINT.
TO CONCLUDE THAT SOME INFORMARION ARE SAVES OUR LIFE THAT CANE BE SHARE TO RIGHT PERSON ON THE RIGHT TIME AND SOME INFORMATION ARE SHARE IN ALL OVER THE WORLD THIS TYPE OF KNOELDEGE DOES THE PEOPLE MUST HAVE .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is very limited and lacks depth. The ideas are presented in a repetitive and simplistic manner, such as the mention of 'terrorists' and 'killing families', which is not a standard or relevant argument for scientific or business information sharing. The position is stated in the introduction but is not consistently maintained or supported with logical reasoning. The essay lacks specific examples from the academic or business world, relying instead on vague generalizations. To improve, you should focus on providing clear, logical arguments supported by relevant real-world examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as 'TO OTHER HAND' and 'TO CONCLUDE THAT'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. The sentences are often disjointed, and the lack of effective linking words means the essay does not flow smoothly. To improve, focus on using a wider range of transition signals (e.g., 'furthermore', 'however', 'consequently') to connect your ideas more logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'REALTED', 'TERORIRTS', 'BELEVIE', 'KNOELDEGE'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the misuse of words often impedes communication. There is little evidence of an attempt to use less common lexical items or collocations appropriate for an academic essay. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to science, business, and ethics, and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the text difficult to understand. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used are often riddled with errors in subject-verb agreement, article usage, and word order (e.g., 'SOME INFORMATION ARE RELATED TO SO MUCH IMPORTANT'). Punctuation is also problematic, with a lack of proper sentence boundaries. The frequency of these errors is high, which significantly impacts the clarity of the writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical mistakes.
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