Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this topic, I completely agree with this statement, that some important information will be shared between citizens , so that they can know about more . I suggest to share all topic with public so they can gain all knowledge .

To begin with, mainly the scientific research, business and the academic related topic must share and discuss with scholars and tutors . Moreover they can circulate the news between their families and friends. So the essential topic citizens may know rapidly. However also good research ,business or some academic related topic and idea can be show in news, articles and newspaper. So all citizens must aware of news update and enhance their capacity. Sometimes many people can gain some idea through internet and social media resources. So it is best way to send information to public about some scientific or business related filed. Those how have not sufficient money they can gain from free website and improve their knowledge. So, in my view sharing information is good way to connect others.

Secondly, we know today's world is running through internet and digitally. When some important information we need to public then just upload it on social pages. While people may aware from some accidents , other nature disaster. Other hand side people also believes that some messages we can't share with public , like some new virus or some important method or code. Otherwise people may working the unauthorised work. Some works are present which needs government permissions and guideline some when all method and idea share with peoples they might do some unsociable work. So some suggest when you shared some valuable data then must be careful.

In conclusion, i believe if some research and idea will be share in the world , then it good for all citizens to know and update . But due to some crime and other work we must share safe platform with sufficient data.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is limited. While you mention the benefits of sharing information (knowledge gain, accessibility) and the risks (security, misuse), the ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The introduction is unclear, as it states you agree with the statement but then discusses both sides, which creates confusion regarding your position. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-supported argument rather than listing general points. The conclusion attempts to summarise, but the position remains slightly ambiguous due to the lack of a clear thesis statement at the start.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Other hand side' is an incorrect collocation, and the transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'those how have not sufficient money', where the connection to the previous sentence is weak. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'nevertheless') more naturally to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple terms like 'good', 'important', and 'share'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'unauthorised work' instead of 'illicit activities' or 'misuse of data', and 'nature disaster' instead of 'natural disaster'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to research, ethics, and information security, and pay closer attention to word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some research and idea will be share'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'people may working the unauthorised work'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is usually understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents a higher score. Focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, specifically verb tenses and the correct use of passive voice, before attempting more complex structures.

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