Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In todays' modernizing era, people have become interested in learning new information. Some people believe that it is beneficial to share a lot of information in scientific researches, business and academic world. While few critics think that only crucial and valuable information should be shared freely. The argument supporting both the statement and my opinion will be discussed further in the essay.

Sharing too much information on different subject of interest is become increasingly important. Subjects like science and scientific researches need evidence and validation from real life experiences. Unlimited information may help an individual to understand the aim and object of the research or studies and may provide the proofs on the topic of research. To illustrate this, researches for any drug or medication require unlimited information based on human and animal trial as it can provide proves about various aspects of medication. Secondly, variety of information in business sector can help people to grow their business. Many article showing public experience in startups enable an individual to learn about entrepreneurship and teach them about concept such as investment, returns and risks.

On contrary, it is often believed by few critics that only valid information should be shared free because too much information sometimes leads to unnecessary confusion. In academics, too much data or addition of few subject needless subject can create burden on student. Also student can face difficulty to remember a lot of information in academic. To illustrate this, overloading of data in few easy subjects like politics, geography history can create stress on learner. Additionally, science researches and article having optimum data makes it easier for other researcher or scientist to learn about studies. Endless information may sometime create confusion in the aspects of studies.

To conclude, too much information may help people to learn and understand concepts deeper. i firmly believe that only vital and valuable information should be shared as it reduces the academic pressure and help people to learn and evaluate the data or information faster.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the argument regarding 'unlimited information' in science is a bit repetitive, and the explanation of why information should be limited in academics relies on somewhat generic examples like 'politics, geography history'. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced reasoning—perhaps discussing the balance between intellectual property rights in business versus the public good in scientific research. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments could be more thoroughly extended.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To illustrate this', 'Secondly', and 'On contrary' (which should be 'On the contrary'). However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel a bit forced. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two viewpoints and your own opinion. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother, avoiding repetitive sentence structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'entrepreneurship', 'validation', and 'intellectual property' (though the latter was implied rather than stated). There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'subjects of interest is become' (should be 'has become') and 'proves' (should be 'proof'). Some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'modernizing era'. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, you need to use more precise and sophisticated collocations to move into the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For instance, 'In todays' modernizing era' (should be 'today's'), 'scientific researches' (research is an uncountable noun), and 'article having' (should be 'articles having'). Subject-verb agreement is also inconsistent, such as 'Many article showing' (should be 'Many articles show'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on proofreading for basic pluralization and subject-verb agreement errors.

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