Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There are so many people who believe that sharing information in various sectors, such as scientific research, business and the academic world is good. On the contrary, many people have faith in that there are some important information which is very valuable. In my perspective, both sides have legit logic.
In scientific research, business and the academic world need a lot of information to improve on those sides. There are some people who has the faith that sharing information as much as possible is good, and they right from their perspective because in scientific research it will be great that how much information they are using. Moreover, if they use more information there is high chance to improve something very easily as well business and academic world.
On the other hand, some people believe that there is some information that is very important or valuable that they cannot share freely, and they are right too. Furthermore, there is some information that is very important that they cannot share in scientific research, business, and the academic world, which might be very helpful for these. Moreover, some people do not want to share there personal information freely. They maybe want to keep that information secret.
From my perspective, people should share there information as much as possible in scientific research, business and academic world so that these sectors can improve more, and if there is some important information that is not shareable then keep them secret
To sum up, it is okay to share those information which is able to share and keep secret those information i
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments provided are repetitive and lack specific, concrete examples to illustrate the points made. For instance, the discussion on why information should be shared remains vague, merely stating it helps 'improve something'. To reach a higher band, you need to extend your ideas with specific real-world examples, such as the role of open-source data in vaccine development or the protection of intellectual property in the pharmaceutical industry.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often mechanical and repetitive. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'On the other hand', they are used in a formulaic way. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the final sentence is incomplete, which disrupts the flow of the conclusion. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, distinct topic sentence that builds logically upon the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive phrases such as 'good', 'important', and 'valuable'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'have faith in that there are' and 'legit logic', which sound unnatural. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to the topic, such as 'intellectual property', 'transparency', or 'proprietary data', rather than repeating general adjectives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('some people has the faith'), incorrect pronoun usage ('share there personal information'), and missing articles. The sentence structure is often repetitive, and the final sentence is unfinished, which is a significant error. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and proofreading for common errors like 'there' versus 'their'. Increasing the variety of sentence types will also help improve your score.
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