Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is often argued that it is better to reveal as much information as possible regarding business, academic world and scientific research. Others believe that some information should not be shared freely as it is more crucial. Although revealing all necessary information may help learners who are financially weak, I believe that when information is free of cost, it can be misued by soem people .
On one side, people believe that free information help students who belong to weaker sections or cannot pay more. This means that when all essential information is avaliable at free of cost, students can learn more without caring about their budget. Therfore, this makes them free of tension and enhance their learning without any obsatcles.
On the other side people have some different view that free information can be misused by some sections of the society. That is to say,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length at only 146 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. This severely limits your ability to develop your ideas. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument and provide a personal opinion, the second body paragraph is incomplete, ending abruptly after only one sentence. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure you provide a full, balanced discussion for both viewpoints and a clear conclusion, while expanding your arguments with specific examples and logical explanations to meet the word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows a basic attempt at logical organization using transition signals like 'On one side' and 'On the other side'. However, the abrupt ending of the text makes it impossible to evaluate the overall progression or the effectiveness of your paragraphing. The cohesion is mechanical, and the lack of a conclusion means the essay fails to provide a coherent summary of your position. To reach a higher band, you need to ensure each paragraph is fully developed and that your ideas flow logically from the introduction to a well-structured conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication, but it lacks the range and precision required for a higher score. You use some repetitive phrasing, such as 'free information' and 'free of cost'. There are also spelling errors, such as 'misued', 'soem', 'avaliable', and 'obsatcles'. To improve, you should aim to use a wider variety of academic vocabulary and ensure your spelling is accurate. Focus on using synonyms to avoid repetition and incorporating more precise collocations related to the topic of research and intellectual property.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally hinder the flow. For example, 'free information help students' should be 'helps', and 'people have some different view' is missing an article. While your meaning is generally clear, the grammatical control is inconsistent. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Additionally, try to incorporate a wider range of complex sentence structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, while ensuring they are grammatically accurate.
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