Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individuals believe that sharing freely with each other in today's fast era is better, while other people say that sharing highly valuable data should also be free. This essay intends to analyze both perspectives. I believe in some fields. sharing information is important in business, science, and other research programs to be successful
On one hand. there are many reasons. While some individuals believe that to be successful in life, we have to share the data for business and academic growth. Some small businesses that are newly started in marked had lack of knowledge where and how to manage the new business and new customers with the help of business information from other individuals. So, they can generate that much potential to grow their business by themselves. for example indian car brand mahindra autos was suffering from lack of knowlege back in 2009 where they were stuck on manufacuring of car engine design and they were looking for help then germany car brand BMW takes the responsiility to help and redesign car engine . Futher mahindra make best car in the Indian automobile market.
On the other, Sharing information that is such valuable and infomarted like madical and big information should not be shared freely because it is private use only many individuals those who worked on information for yeras and keep this information personal . for example coca cola the soft drink brand of usa have a patent of this information how the make formula for making coca cola.
I believe that it is essential to share information on a small level so every small and indivuals could grow on their support. But to keep valuable information to themselves
To coculde it, can be said that the attribute to be sucessfull in life specially in today era we require much knowlwgde as possible which help of sharing and give information and it is necersilly to keep information that is private to yourself.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the example of Mahindra and BMW is relevant, the explanation of the 'valuable information' side is underdeveloped and lacks depth. The conclusion is somewhat fragmented and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack the necessary detail to reach a higher band. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a clear, logical explanation of why information should or should not be shared, rather than relying on brief examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On one hand' and 'On the other', but they are often followed by sentences that do not connect smoothly to the previous thought. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of proper sentence structure makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical and occasionally confusing for the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'marked' instead of 'market', 'madical' instead of 'medical', and 'coculde' instead of 'conclude'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'patent' and 'automobile market', the overall range is narrow. Many sentences rely on basic phrasing, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas precisely. To improve, focus on learning collocations and proofreading for common spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence fragments. For example, 'Some small businesses that are newly started in marked had lack of knowledge' is grammatically incorrect. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is often misused, with periods placed in the middle of sentences. These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement is essential.
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