Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In present generation the information play a key role for development in everything. On one hand, Some people believe that sharing the information is much good for scientific reserach. On the other hand, Some people believe that certain information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. I believe with 2nd opinion which describe each information is important based on it types.
On one side, The information can be vaires in medical, technological, and social. The free access of information will develop each sector and give much clarity. Fruthermore, Providing Information to scientific research center can get advanced in medicion, operations. The information play a key role in business activities and product development. The Academic information help to create skilled workers and give knowledge to people about startup company, For example sharing information to scientific reserach center will give solution to diseases, information to business can boost new companies to create employment to people, giving information to academic will help for globalistion.
On the other side, The free access of information can lead to misuage of it. The most valuable information about busniess , company proparties , new plans can be copyed by other and then competition starts. Whlie business deals, new project are most valuable. Meanwhile, In medical field free information can lead to new diseases creation by evluating solution to it. Moverover, In some case, People can new weapons and explosers with the free army information. In academic people will understand the wrong information due to free access, Then it can lead to war and political problems, For example if people get information about budget planning, public fund information, medical formula, Business product formula, That can lead to social problem.
In summary, I support that it's important to secure some information which is valuable and important. By sharing the free information to people can lead to misuse it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention medical and business sectors, the arguments regarding the risks of sharing information (e.g., 'new diseases creation' or 'new weapons') are not fully supported or logically explained, which limits the depth of the response. The essay covers all parts of the prompt, but the reasoning lacks the nuance required for a higher band score. To improve, ensure that your supporting examples are more realistic and logically connected to the main point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On one side' and 'On the other side' are used, but the transitions between sentences within paragraphs are sometimes abrupt. There are also issues with referencing; for instance, 'I believe with 2nd opinion which describe each information' is grammatically awkward and hinders the flow of ideas. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'reserach', 'medicion', 'vaires', 'busniess', 'proparties', 'copyed', 'evluating', and 'explosers'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. Furthermore, the word choice is often repetitive, such as the constant use of 'information' and 'good'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary and focus on accurate spelling and correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('information play a key role'), article usage ('the information'), and incorrect word forms ('sharing the information is much good'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and capitalization errors. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors will help improve your score.
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