Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the Contemporary, research field in different educational directions is the outmost need for better future development. Some believe too much data or information can have better impact, while others argue that less, and precise information, that could be share free of cost can more effective and valuable. Both have different perpectove and advanges, but in my opinion, sharing more information and data can provide more deepth, understand and clear concepts either in research, bussiness, and educational word.

Firstly, more results and more knowledge, explain every thing related to thr concern topic in research, idea in bussiness, and chapters or book in academic field. If we have more information, we can have options to work in for future. Furthermore, exessive information can give a clear direction for future reaserch. Multiple articles that have been uploaded on different website, can lead us to study in depth amd clear our understandings. For instance, a review article on any disease, such as cardiac fibrosis, contian enough data to read. Thats lead us to a clear direction for future study.

On the other hand, consize information has its own benefits. More to the the point information, could save our time and our stimna. If we need any specific data related to bussiness, investigative study, or for academic purposes, by having to the point information can save our time, focuse and enery as well. For example, consize data related to any specific bussiness field, such as pharmaceutical business, can save more time and energy.

In my opinion, a detail oriented data is necessary to get a clear concepts, and in depth study. Although, consize information could save or time, as in this competitive world we should not spend our more time on one particular task. But to get clear concepts and to have a better outcome we should have had an enough knowledge about it. For example, in research field, we need indepth knowledge, clear concpets to start our study and to have a clear results to could be defended then.

In conclusion, indepth information and consize information are better in their own perspective but what we can achieve by having more data amd clear concepts, can neither be accomplished from cosize information.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. While you mention the benefits of sharing information (depth, clarity) and the benefits of concise information (time-saving), the arguments lack specific, well-developed examples. The example of 'cardiac fibrosis' is a good start, but it is not fully connected to the broader argument about why open access is superior to restricted access. To improve, ensure that each paragraph provides a distinct, logical step forward in your argument rather than restating the same points about 'depth' and 'time' multiple times.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors. Referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the two sides of the argument could be more sophisticated. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between ideas is more naturally expressed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'perpectove', 'advanges', 'deepth', 'bussiness', 'consize', 'stimna', 'concpets'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'cardiac fibrosis' and 'pharmaceutical business', the range is limited, and there is a reliance on basic descriptors. To improve, focus on accuracy in spelling and try to incorporate more precise academic collocations to express your ideas with greater sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'information... can more effective'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'detail oriented data is necessary to get a clear concepts'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.

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