Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The scientific reserch is senstive topic some people think that the information valuable do not share with anyone and other beleive that it is good for new learner if information is shared.

However, It is very important to share information with public to develop their interest in sceintific invantion. They seek their knowledge and try to take part in sceince based things. It is also very important for young generation to indroduced with sceince related subject and some research. In developing counties like germany teachers share sceince based research with students to develop their interset and this technique is very successful students dream to become sceintist and take part in science programs.

Although, Some research is very senstive it is very important to keep them safe. Like some experiment relared to harmful chemical if they are shared. Public try to do that experimat which caused many problems. Some research related to some nuclers projects which is very personal and senstive. If they are realsed publically enemy country take advantage from that and try to attack country interest using their personal details.

In my percption, It is good to share information with public. But not all information some research is not for public and if it is realsed enemy took advantage.

In conclusion, Government have to seprate research between public and higher authorities. If all research are not shared it cause many problems in some buissness. because a lot of people took advantage from sceince and try to do better in their life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention the benefits of sharing information for education and the risks of sharing sensitive data, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. The mention of Germany as an example is vague and does not clearly illustrate how sharing research specifically functions in that context. The conclusion is somewhat contradictory, as it suggests that not sharing information causes problems in business, but then fails to elaborate on this point. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and fully developed supporting evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Although, Some research...' is used incorrectly as a transition, and the flow between sentences is frequently disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between government policy and business success is not logically linked. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they are often misused or placed awkwardly, which disrupts the logical progression of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. There are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'reserch', 'senstive', 'sceintific', 'invantion', 'indroduced', 'nuclers', and 'buissness'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally make it difficult for the reader to follow your meaning. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use more sophisticated or academic collocations. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise, topic-specific language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'The scientific reserch is senstive topic some people think...'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar (e.g., 'Government have to seprate', 'enemy took advantage') are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of control over basic grammatical rules significantly impacts the quality of the writing.

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