Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individual thinks that it good to share information as possible in scientific research , business and the academic world. Other individual thinks that information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discussing both view of points that and afterword giving my personal opinion.

On the one hand sharing to much information about the some of specific topic like scientific research , business and the academic worlds are good and very usable for instance some like scientific research are so much important for others like they are base for doing some short of task what they really want to do and if we talk about the business all the growth are depend on the bases of pre available data or stats which require the company for build something for instance a company need to build from scratch are need to pre available data for there initial days moreover the academic world there are depending on the pre exist data or book for grading information about any specific need so that is important for having some amount of data they have and want to grading information.

On the other hand others believes that the some of information which require to be share have to share freely because the credibility of the information as not that much expected and if the data are relevant to much then the author do not get the that much credit that they require for example if we talk about the scientific research then artificial intelligence are one of the growth topic if the build data are require publicly and freely then it is very danger for the some individuals and some relevant information which require to getting share has to be shared such as academic world data .

In conclusion , Information are require to be shared and it is relevant to shared then it has to be publicly available such as academic information . But some of data are important and getting not to be available on the public domain such as information like scientific research which cost individuals to getting harmed by wrong peoples so it is not have to publicly freely available.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments are repetitive and lack specific, well-explained examples. For instance, the discussion on artificial intelligence in the second body paragraph is vague and does not clearly link to the prompt's core issue of information sharing. The position is present but lacks depth, as the reasoning remains superficial throughout. To improve, you should focus on providing concrete, logical explanations for your points rather than repeating general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the flow of ideas is often disjointed due to the misuse of cohesive devices and awkward sentence structures. Phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion' are used, but the internal logic within paragraphs is weak. Many sentences are run-on or lack clear transitions, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Referencing is often unclear, particularly with the use of 'the' and 'some', which creates confusion regarding the specific subjects being discussed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'good', 'important', and 'data' without demonstrating a range of academic or topic-specific terminology. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'short of task' instead of 'type of task' and 'grading information' which does not fit the context. The lack of precision in your vocabulary makes it difficult to convey complex ideas effectively. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated synonyms and collocations related to research and business would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Some individual thinks', 'information are require'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or poorly constructed, making the text difficult to read. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the ones attempted are often faulty. To reach a higher band, you must focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and improving your control over punctuation and pluralisation.

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