Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are various information's related to anything, such as business and academic, scientific research, we share with others because of improved our knowledge. it is extremely important our daily lives.

In this essay, I will discus both rely people on this topics and my ideas will support this concept. According to some people people believe that, a lot of information as possible scientific research like that business and academic world.

A lot of scientific information must be good, those are get through the different things such as books, newspapers, and social media.

On the other hand, the researcher information can support our knowledge for different purposes like that, invention the atom bobs and weapons'.

Secondly, other people believe that, others details or valuable too shared freely because these can survive us from one point here another.

Environmental, and researcher's history and our culture problem too much important as we live around the natural things like that trees, greenhouse and, lake and canal.

According other think that, we can share with others freely that is why, people will invented new technology with the of information, such as, automobile, new machines.

On the contrary, people also should more information another things.

From my point of view, there are very important information for example, scientific and other information's.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding information sharing in scientific research, business, and academia, but the development of ideas is severely hindered by limited language and a failure to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, as the text contains only 215 words. Furthermore, the student struggles to maintain a clear position, and the arguments presented are vague and underdeveloped. Sentences such as 'the researcher information can support our knowledge for different purposes like that, invention the atom bobs and weapons' fail to clearly articulate the complexities of the prompt. Because the task is only partially addressed with underdeveloped ideas and an under-length penalty, this warrants a band score of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation of the essay shows basic paragraphing attempts, but overall coherence is significantly disrupted by poor sentence structures and a lack of logical progression. While transition words like 'In this essay', 'On the other hand', and 'Secondly' are used, they often introduce confused or disconnected statements. Referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader struggling to follow the relationship between ideas. For instance, the transition 'According other think that, we can share with others freely that is why...' creates confusion rather than logical flow. Paragraphing is also erratic, with isolated sentences forming separate blocks. Consequently, the structural progression fails to meet the criteria for a higher band, resulting in a score of 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often misused, which severely strains the reader's comprehension. The writer attempts some topic-related terms like 'scientific research', 'business', and 'academic world', but these are overshadowed by non-standard word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'information's' and 'valuable too shared freely'. There are noticeable issues with word forms, such as 'invention' used instead of 'inventing' or 'invention of'. While there is a minimally adequate range to touch upon the topic, the frequency of lexical errors and unnatural phrasings place this response firmly at band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the text, with a very limited range of structures successfully produced. Most complex sentence attempts are heavily flawed and ungrammatical, such as 'There are various information's related to anything, such as business and academic, scientific research, we share with others because of improved our knowledge.' Errors in tense, word order, articles, and prepositions are pervasive and frequent, causing significant difficulty for the reader and frequently obscuring meaning. Simple sentences also contain basic errors, and punctuation is often misused. Due to the high frequency of errors across nearly every sentence, the grammar corresponds to a band 4.0.

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