Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The ongoing debate is that some individuals believe that it is good to reveal information in scientific analysis,business and educational world.On the other hand,sensitive and precious information is not communicated freely among the individuals.
But I agree from the individuals who believe that the information is delievered freely among the society because they think for the welfare of society.
Intitially,the individuals who believe that the data in the field of scientific findings,business and academia id delieverd freely among the society.The data in the field of medicinal research may be used to save millions of lifesand become the last hope for many people in society.The research in the field of business may be used to eliminate unemployment from the society and give millions of jobs to the who were seeking for the employment.And the findings in the field of academic world may be used for the overall progress and prosperity of a country.
The people who believe that the sensitive and precious information is not delievered freely among the individuals.Because in some circumstances they are right,the se
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the task by outlining both views and giving a personal opinion, but the response is severely underdeveloped and abruptly cut off. Crucially, the length requirement of 250 words is not met, with the text containing only 176 words. While the writer manages to state their view in sentences like 'I agree from the individuals who believe that the information is delievered freely', the ideas lack adequate extension and support. Furthermore, the final paragraph breaks off mid-sentence ('Because in some circumstances they are right,the se...'), resulting in an incomplete response. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, which heavily limits the band score under the official descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates some basic structural organisation with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding attempt, but the progression of ideas is hindered by the abrupt ending. Paragraphing is attempted, although the third paragraph is overly dense and combines multiple distinct points without sufficient breathing room. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, heavily relying on phrases like 'The individuals who believe' and 'The research in the field of'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of a finished conclusion significantly impacts the overall cohesion and logical flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on formulaic phrases such as 'scientific analysis', 'business and educational world', and 'welfare of society'. There are noticeable spelling and word formation errors throughout the text, including 'Intitially', 'delievered', and 'lifes'. While the student attempts some subject-specific terminology like 'medicinal research' and 'unemployment', the overall lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The frequent errors in word choice and spelling occasionally cause strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and repetitive complex forms. There are frequent errors in prepositions and collocation, such as 'agree from the individuals' instead of 'agree with', and punctuation spacing errors like missing spaces after commas. Furthermore, sentence structures are often awkward or incomplete, culminating in a fragment at the very end of the text. While the core meaning of the earlier sentences remains understandable, the density of grammatical slips and the incomplete ending prevent the writing from achieving a higher score.
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