Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The ongoing debate is that some individuals believe that it is good to reveal information in scientific analysis,business and educational world.On the other hand, sensitive and precious information is not communicated freely among the individuals.
However, I agree with the individuals who believe that the information is delievered freely among the society because they think for the welfare of society.
Intially, the individuals who believe that the data in the field of scientific findings,business and academia id deliverd freely among the society.The data in the field of medicinal research may be used to save millions of lives and become the last hope for many people in society.The research in the field of business may be used to eliminate unemployment from the society and give millions of jobs to those who were seeking for the employment and the findings in the field of academic world maybe used for the overall progress and prosperity of a country.
The people who believe that the sensitive and precious information is not delivered freely among the individuals.Because in some circumstances they are right,the
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address both views and states an opinion, mentioning scientific analysis, business, and education. However, the response falls significantly short of the required 250 words, containing only 178 words. Due to this severe under-length issue, the task is only partially addressed, and the ideas presented in the body paragraphs remain highly underdeveloped. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly in the second body paragraph with a fragmented sentence ("Because in some circumstances they are right,the"). While the candidate attempts to outline arguments for both sides, the lack of completion and insufficient word count pull this criterion down to a Band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts a standard structure with an introduction and body paragraphs, but the overall coherence is severely impacted by the abrupt ending and lack of a conclusion. Paragraphing is attempted, but the third paragraph is overly dense and contains multiple ideas jumbled together without adequate transitional progression. Cohesive devices are repetitive and basic, such as 'Intially' and 'However', and referencing is occasionally unclear. The mechanical flow is disrupted by frequent punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'analysis,business'). These issues restrict the text to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying heavily on standard phrases like 'society', 'information', 'scientific analysis', and 'business'. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary such as 'prosperity', 'unemployment', and 'sensitive and precious information', but word choices are sometimes imprecise or awkward, such as 'deliverd freely among the society' instead of 'to society'. Spelling errors are present, notably 'Intially' and 'delievered'. Because the range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors in collocation and spelling, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and emerging complex sentence structures, but control is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation flaws throughout the text, including missing articles ('in educational world', 'in field of business'), incorrect prepositions ('in the field of academic world'), and typographical issues like missing spaces after punctuation marks. Moreover, the sentence structure breaks down entirely at the end of the text ('Because in some circumstances they are right,the'), leaving a dependent clause dangling without completion. These persistent errors and the incomplete structure reflect Band 5.0 descriptors.
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