Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Most people think to sharing data in the field of research, business and academic sectors. Others think that some information is so confidential that not to be shared publicly. I believe that we should share information with other people to help mankind.
On the one hand, some people believe we should share information in scientific research to help other researchers. If we share our research publicly it will save the time and energy of other researchers , so that they can publish their research early. For example, at the time of COVID-19 the scientists and researchers from almost every country shared their research, so that they can get the idea to make the vaccine. Furthermore, Businessmen should also share their strategies of marketing and related areas, so that different organizations can adopt the same strategy to get successful. It can also save the money of organizations which they spend on useless policies. Moreover, in the field of academics the bright students and teachers should share their tricks with other, so that they can learn more and get good grades.
On the other hand, some people believe that we should not share information freely because some information is very important. Some people think that if we share our research publicly in in the the field of pharmaceuticals, someone will steal the data and make the required drug before us. For instance, companies like Coca Cola do not share the entire ingredients which makes the taste of the drink, due to this that no other organizations can acquire the same results. Sometimes it is very important to save our data so that nobody threatens us.
To conclude, I believe that it is important we should help others by providing them the information which can make their lives very easier.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—the benefits of sharing scientific, business, and academic information as well as the risks of keeping confidential data protected—and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. The ideas are generally relevant and supported with examples, such as the COVID-19 vaccine development and Coca-Cola's secret recipe. However, some arguments remain somewhat under-developed or general, such as the points regarding business strategies and academic tips, which lean towards over-generalisation. Overall, the prompt is successfully covered, placing this response at Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure, using standard transitional phrases like 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude'. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. For example, referencing and linking within sentences occasionally feel abrupt, as seen in the sentence 'Some people think that if we share our research publicly in in the the field of pharmaceuticals...', where repetitive phrasing and clunky conjunctions disrupt the natural flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct viewpoints, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully communicating key concepts with terms such as 'confidential', 'pharmaceuticals', and 'strategies'. However, there are noticeable word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'think to sharing data' instead of 'think about sharing data', and repetition of terms like 'research', 'information', and 'share'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited precision. Spelling is generally fine, but lexical limitations and repetitive phrasing restrict the score to a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer employs a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing conditional structures like 'If we share our research publicly it will save the time...'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing throughout, such as 'not to be shared publicly' and double prepositions like 'in in the the field'. Punctuation is occasionally neglected, and some complex structures contain errors that require the reader to re-read passages. Because errors are noticeable and affect sentence-level accuracy while communication remains intact, a Band 5.5 is appropriate.
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