Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is widely believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world, while others argue that some information is too much important or valuable to be shared freely. well it is very beneficial to share much information with another but it does not mean that we share our personal data with others. It may cause disadvantages. In my opinion, we should send limited and useful information to others instead of personal data.
Firstly, it is very helpful to send much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. it may be useful in projects and daily work. people are stay connected with others by phones. for example, business men and other people are not only sending useful information but also sharing details of their projects and work. It is also essential for scientific purpose.
On the other hand, sending information is a good idea but it is seemed that there is a lot of wrong information spreading by social media but it is not the main cause the main source of sending information is modern phone. Sometimes people send false information on internet. This may includes someone's personal data. For instance, many individuals are involve in sending wrong information of others. The data include photos, videos and other details. It can cast an negative impact on society.
To conclude up with, it is very beneficial for people to send information with others . We should be careful for sharing our personal data. It may leads to several impacts. The information should be limited in every case, or there is restriction on sending false information.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the sharing of information in scientific research, business, and academia, but it narrows the focus primarily to general internet and social media usage rather than fully engaging with the professional and academic contexts specified in the prompt. The student presents a position that we should share limited information instead of personal data, but this argument is somewhat confused with issues of false information and privacy. Main ideas are repeated rather than extended and supported with robust examples. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, which aligns closely with the Band 5 descriptors where ideas remain limited and under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing some basic structure. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and transitions between paragraphs feel abrupt and mechanical. For instance, the transition from business and scientific research in paragraph two to false information on social media in paragraph three lacks logical continuity. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear; phrases like 'It may cause disadvantages' and 'It is also essential' rely on ambiguous pronouns that make it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'scientific research', 'business', 'personal data', and 'social media'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors throughout the text, including phrases like 'It is widely believe', 'too much important', and 'people are stay connected'. Spelling and morphological errors, such as 'business men', 'involve' instead of 'involved', and 'an negative impact', cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted lexical repertoire typical of a Band 5 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple and repetitive clauses. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to noticeable grammatical errors such as agreement issues ('It may leads') and missing articles or capitalization errors. Punctuation is also problematic, with lowercase letters beginning sentences and missing periods. Frequent errors in grammar and mechanics cause strain and occasional difficulty for the reader, placing this response firmly in the Band 5 category for grammatical range and accuracy.
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