Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Now a days there is a major discuction where some individual think that it is great to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world however on other side some people bleaves that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared without any cost. This essay mention both side point before giving a true opinion.

Provide a well reserch information about scientific research, business and the academic its a great act as well as if it also incrage everyone to learn and educate more about the topic and not only high earn individual but lower class also get the benefit moreover if somthing is free so no one can denied it to take intrest is however the coz is if some thing is free of cost then people take it not sereasly and take half information that become more riskyer the no information.

On the second hand scientific research, business and the academic subjects is done not free of cost it invest millions of dollor to reserch, survey and test by proffesers and there assistant and with that proffesers and there assistant also charge its fees so if for some genuin information if you have to pay a some amount it overall not a bad desigen. With that if you invest in something so you go into it more seriasly that can help the reserch becouse you rise the questions and that make it more perfect , However there is some disadvantage that the one who have capicity to invest only that get benifit it only.

In conclusion mentioning the point of view of both the side , I sensiarly bleafe that to continewing the reserch for long run funds shoud be nessasary and if it charge for it there is no issue for that.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on sharing information freely versus restricting it, and concludes with a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding free information mentions that it encourages education and helps lower-income groups, but this is not fully extended with concrete examples. Similarly, the counterargument concerning funding and research costs is introduced but lacks depth. The position is clear throughout, but the overall development places this response at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which establishes a basic structure reflecting the introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak. Sentences often run together without adequate punctuation, making the flow difficult to follow. For example, the sentence starting with 'Provide a well reserch information...' crams multiple distinct thoughts into a single continuous block without clear separation. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a mechanical and sometimes confusing arrangement of ideas. Referencing is also occasionally unclear.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary range is limited and basic, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally strain the reader's comprehension. Examples of errors include 'discuction' instead of discussion, 'bleaves' instead of believes, 'incrage' instead of encourage, 'sereasly' instead of seriously, 'riskyer' instead of riskier, and 'desigen' instead of design. While the student attempts to use topic-related terms like 'scientific research' and 'academic world', the persistent inaccuracies in spelling and collocation place the lexical control at a Band 4 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex or compound sentences are consistently faulty due to a complete lack of standard punctuation (such as periods and commas). Almost every paragraph consists of one or two extremely long run-on sentences. Grammatical errors are frequent, including tense inconsistencies, subject-verb agreement issues ('professers and there assistant also charge its fees'), and incorrect preposition usage. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and significantly impede communication.

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