Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the current era, it is true that few individuals consider that it is benificial to spread data as much it is possible regarding several stages e.g scientific research, business and academic world.In addition with this several creature think that some knowledge is too necessary to be shared freely. These both type of people are true because some crucial data are not to be shared.
I reckon that individiuals with these opinion are honest. We cannot consider someone a liar. First and foremost, individuals who believe that in this world it is consider to be a good thing to help someone by giving any kind of information regarding anything. This will favour to other person a lot. We should help everyone by providing any type of knowledge which we had whether it is about life experience or any other thing. I consider this habit in one of the best deeds. If someone facing any difficulty in their life due to the lack of knowledge if we are elligible to favour that person we should provide him
In addition to this some particular persons believe that some informaton is not mean to be shared with anyone. If we share every information with others then it had a major disadvantage to us. Because I have faced this situation. Few months ago one of my closest friend was angry with me and he splitted all of my secrets to everywhere . On that day I realized we should share information with anyone which wouldn't make us regret.
In coclusion, I am in the favour of both kind of individuals . But according to my temprament we should data or information which is meant to be shared.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views regarding the sharing of information in scientific research, business, and academia, and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat simplistic. For instance, the discussion on why people believe sharing is good focuses on general help rather than the specific domains mentioned in the prompt, such as scientific progress or corporate advantage. Similarly, the argument against sharing relies heavily on a personal anecdote about secrets rather than broader societal or economic considerations. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the depth of extension is closer to Band 5.0 and 6.0 descriptors, resulting in a score of 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, featuring an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, such as 'In addition with this several creature think', which uses inappropriate vocabulary ('creature' instead of 'people'). Paragraphing is somewhat erratic, with sentence groupings appearing disjointed, and cohesive devices are often mechanical or misused (e.g., 'First and foremost' followed by underdeveloped arguments). Referencing is also unclear in places, making it difficult to follow the flow of ideas. These features align with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeding effective communication. Examples of inappropriate word choices and spelling errors include 'benificial', 'elligible', 'temprament', and referring to humans as 'creature'. The range of vocabulary is limited to everyday words, and attempts to use less common items fail due to poor collocation and inaccuracies (e.g., 'splitted all of my secrets to everywhere'). Because the errors are noticeable and cause some difficulty for the reader, this performance sits firmly within Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('some crucial data are not'), tense inconsistencies, and poor preposition use (e.g., 'in the favour of', 'according to my temprament'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing full stops and irregular spacing. While simple sentences can sometimes be understood, the frequent errors in grammar cause difficulty for the reader, reflecting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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