Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Some people believe that it is formal to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the educational world.Other believe that some information is too important or pricesless to be share freely.
On the one hand , shareing information to every person or every group of people. That the information about health or acadmaic . this is fabouls to share this information. Becuase this information help the people about there health and many more like eduction . Where the sceitest make more invention in medical feild like new medicine .Which help in our daily life. If you have knloged like that share with every one nad every where.
On the other hand you have a securite information like army cant . or some thing like that which is harm ful for human being. Or not just haram for human , but also dangerous for our envermint, do not share to other ,when they share with the wrong person , the w
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 250 words, finishing at only 164 words, which significantly restricts the development of ideas and results in an incomplete response that abruptly ends mid-sentence. While the student attempts to address both views regarding open-sharing versus restricted information, the ideas are severely underdeveloped. For example, the mention of health and education is stated vaguely as 'this is fabouls to share', without exploring the deeper implications of open scientific research. Furthermore, the discussion on sensitive information mentions security and the environment, but the explanation is cut off abruptly. Because the task is substantially under length and the position is not fully articulated or supported, the response falls into the lower bands.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the text is hindered by major issues with paragraphing, sentence boundaries, and overall flow. The response begins with a poorly linked introduction and quickly degrades into disjointed fragments. Sentences such as 'On the one hand , shareing information to every person or every group of people. That the information about health or acadmaic.' fail to form complete thoughts and break basic grammatical and cohesive rules. Paragraphing is attempted with 'On the other hand', but the second body paragraph breaks off unfinished. There is a lack of logical progression, and cohesive devices are either misused or absent, making the text very difficult to follow. Referencing is unclear, particularly with pronoun use and abrupt shifts in topics.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely limited and heavily impacted by pervasive spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. The student repeatedly misspells common and less common words, such as 'shareing' instead of sharing, 'acadmaic' for academic, 'fabouls' for fabulous, 'knloged' for knowledge, 'securite' for security, and 'envermint' for environment. Word choices are frequently unnatural or incorrect for the context, such as using 'formal' instead of 'normal' or 'beneficial' in the opening sentence. While the student attempts to touch upon academic, scientific, and security-related vocabulary, the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies places this performance firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text, featuring a very limited range of structures and a high density of errors. The student relies heavily on simple sentence fragments, and attempts at complex structures are consistently flawed, resulting in ungrammatical clauses like 'Which help in our daily life' or 'If you have knloged like that share with every one nad every where.' Punctuation is also misused, with frequent unnecessary spaces around commas and periods, and sentences that lack main verbs. The abundance of severe structural errors means that meaning is frequently obscured or distorted, leading to a band score of 4.0.
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