Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some indivudals fields of academica, industry and scientific study, it is beneficial as much knowledge as apossiblle, whereas some people believe that few information is too benificial to shared freely.I firmly beleif that if education sector share data to business and scientific purpose it might be a great option to invent new idea .
Nowadays, people want something innovative and as well as businessman want proggress in their business, if researcher do not share their data to scientic study purpose there will be no invention and our economy will not experienced growth.In modern world, science and business depend on our academic data because no financial organization can improve their economic growth, in addition there will be no scientific invention if we do not provide our academic data to them.
On the other hand, few bad persopn are misusing our data to other purpose as a result our economy and scientific work facing few difficulties.We should control our data centre and after that oiur economy and scientific research will experienced new invention as well as our economic growth will be increased dramatically.Eventually, share data to scientific purpose and for business are significantly effective, rather than do not share.
In our world, most of the country are doing well just for using academic data as well as every business could possible for using data from academic researcher, whereas few country are not using this strategy and they are not growing rapidly.
Overall, data sharing to scientific research and business is more effective and we should protect our data from natorious user otherwise we will experienced hazard in our future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on data sharing and providing a clear personal opinion that sharing is beneficial. However, the ideas are relatively basic, repetitive, and lack fully developed supporting examples. For instance, the mention that 'business want proggress in their business' remains general and underdeveloped. The writer does attempt to explore both perspectives, covering the economic and scientific benefits of open data as well as the risks of misuse by 'bad persopn'. Overall, the task is addressed, but the depth of argumentation aligns best with Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, showing some overall organization with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed and lacks a clear logical flow. Cohesive devices are used, but they are frequently repetitive or inaccurate, such as 'whereas' and 'in addition'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with pronouns and dangling phrases like 'rather than do not share'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, resulting in a somewhat mechanical structure that fits the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and heavily impacted by frequent spelling errors, such as 'indivudals', 'academica', 'apossiblle', 'beleif', 'scientic', 'persopn', 'oiur', and 'natorious'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'innovative', 'economy', and 'dramatically', but these attempts are often undermined by incorrect word forms and collocations, such as 'scientific work facing few difficulties'. While communication is generally maintained despite the lexical strain, the frequent errors and restricted range place this at a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most complex sentence attempts are faulty or grammatically confused, such as 'Some indivudals fields of academica, industry and scientific study, it is beneficial as much knowledge as apossiblle'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('science and business depend', 'researcher do not share', 'economy will not experienced'), tenses, and prepositional usage. Punctuation errors are also prevalent. Because errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, the writing demonstrates characteristics of Band 4.0, though the overall meaning can still be parsed.
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