Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Since, Nowdays people get informations on internet in this differents apps, is the shortest way ,I sotrongly agree with the statment ,however other people choice opposite side ,it fully denpended on personal opinion.
To commence idividuals is very fast in world, they have on time in everyone,he want to choice the shortless way to get information,the easily way is on internet this very helpful and better facilitate on different apps .The majority is agree, because their saving the time,however different apps are not intersetedand other one is better.In my opinion scientific research is a good way to get instructions.
And secondly on anther way is discussed to people is not time limited ,to wanted physical interaction and a men is trustful,but it is easily to understands to community and realy life is very different individual have on time to sit other,it is a bad effect to socity.For instant to discussion on ther is having a timeable prosess ,Majority choice to different way like online to use internet is no savefly ,however the world runuing is very fast.I personaly requimended to get information in both side and this ia a better things.
In conclusion, we wanted the information not choice on one way becuase is not fully right , both of these ways can get the instructions ,the overworld pepole is very busy on life. Discussion for everyone is the strongly weapon if sit on other is so friendly and lovely to get and give the differet thimgs to other, or guided the childhood .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response touches upon the topic of sharing information versus keeping it private, mentioning scientific research and the internet, but fails to fully discuss both views in a structured manner. The prompt asks to discuss whether research, business, and academic data should be shared freely or kept confidential due to its value, and to provide a personal opinion. While the student states "I strongly agree with the statement" and later suggests using both sides, the argument is underdeveloped and unclear. Concepts such as 'scientific research is a good way to get instructions' are disconnected from the core prompt. Ideas are presented in a fragmented way, and the response only minimally addresses the complexities of the prompt, aligning with the criteria for Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization and progression of ideas are severely disrupted throughout the essay. The text lacks logical transitions and clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is confusing, moving abruptly from internet apps to scientific research, and then to physical interaction without clear cohesive links. Repetitive phrases like 'different apps' and 'get information' are used inadequately to glue sentences together, and referencing is frequently unclear. The cohesive devices used are mechanical and inaccurate, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary is basic, limited, and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'people', 'get information', 'internet', and 'different apps'. There are severe spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'Nowdays', 'informations', 'sotrongly', 'statment', 'denpended', 'idividuals', 'shortless', 'intersetedand', 'anther', 'realy', 'socity', 'For instant', 'ther', 'timeable', 'prosess', 'savefly', 'runuing', 'requimended', 'ia', 'becuase', 'overworld', and 'differet'. These lexical errors and limitations frequently strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structure of the essay is extremely weak, showing a very limited range of accurate structures. The text is dominated by severe run-on sentences, comma splices, and fragment errors, such as 'Since, Nowdays people get informations on internet in this differents apps, is the shortest way ,I sotrongly agree with the statment ,however other people choice opposite side ,it fully denpended on personal opinion.' Subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and clause structures are almost entirely uncontrolled. Errors are extremely frequent and constantly distort meaning, creating significant difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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