Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Opinions differ regarding the extent of disclosing information. While Some people believe that it is good to share more facts as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world for more accurate results, I believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely because it can put subjects financial accounts in danger.

A particularly noteworthy benefit of oversharing information in scientific research is its potential to produce more precise results. This can be largely attributed to the fact that most researchers use the information they get to make general overview of a particular field. This means that, if researchers are given more facts, they are likely to make more precise conclusion rather than relying on general overview. This can be exemplified by medical practitioners carrying out a research on effects of COVID-19 disease. If they are given more information, they are likely to get definite results, which can be used for medical purposes.

Nevertheless, it would be unrealistic to overlook the fact that disclosing too much information can be risk, since the shared information can put individuals life in danger. This is particularly concerning because hackers may use information from online surveys to hack people's bank accounts, thereby stealing money from the respective accounts. By having access to people's personal data, hackers are better positioned to redeem and use it for their personal gain. In practical terms some surveys require an individual to fill personal details such as phone number, full names as it appears in national ID, and other details, which can be used to swap the individual sim cards. As a consequence, participants life are put under financial risks.

In conclusion, although Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world for more accurate results, I think some data is too important or too valuable to be shared freely because it can put respondents financial accounts in danger.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—sharing information in scientific research, business, and academia versus keeping valuable data secure—and provides a clear personal position. In the body paragraphs, the writer extends and supports ideas, such as mentioning medical practitioners researching COVID-19 to illustrate scientific benefits, and online surveys leading to compromised bank accounts for the opposing view. Although the discussion on business is somewhat under-developed compared to science and finance, the main tenets of the prompt are successfully met throughout. The position remains consistent from the introduction through to the conclusion. Therefore, this performance aligns closely with the Band 7 requirements, as it addresses all parts of the task with a clear position and well-supported ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The essay displays clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Each paragraph has a distinct focus: introduction, scientific benefits, security risks, and conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'A particularly noteworthy benefit', 'Nevertheless', and 'In conclusion' are used appropriately to guide the reader through the argument. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and effectively. However, referencing is occasionally repetitive, and some transitional phrases could be more varied. Overall, the logical structure and clear progression place this response solidly within the Band 7 range for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'noteworthy benefit', 'hackers', and 'financial accounts'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'subjects financial accounts in danger' instead of 'subjects' financial accounts', and minor slips in phrasing like 'make more precise conclusion' instead of 'conclusions'. Spelling is generally accurate, and the vocabulary allows the writer to convey their ideas effectively without impeding communication. This performance fits the Band 6 descriptor well, as the vocabulary is adequate and attempts less common lexical items despite some inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing structures such as conditional clauses ('If they are given more information, they are likely to get definite results') and relative clauses. There are some grammar and punctuation errors, including missing plural markers ('participants life are put') and minor agreement issues. However, these errors rarely impede communication, and the meaning remains clear throughout. Because there is a reasonable variety of sentence structures alongside persistent minor errors, this response achieves a Band 6 score for grammatical range and accuracy.

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