Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Opinions differ regarding how information should be disclosed. While some people believe that it is good to share more facts as much as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world for more accurate results, I believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely because it can put subjects' financial accounts in danger.

A particularly noteworthy benefit of oversharing information in scientific research is its potential to produce more precise results. This can be largely attributed to the fact that most researchers use the information they get to make a general overview of a particular field. This means that, if researchers are given more facts, they are likely to make more precise conclusion rather than relying on a general overview. This can be exemplified by medical practitioners carrying out a research on effects of COVID-19 disease. If they are given more information, they are likely to get definite results, which can be used for medical purposes.

Nevertheless, it would be unrealistic to overlook the fact that disclosing too much information can be risk, since the shared information can put individuals' life in danger. This is particularly concerning because hackers may use information from online surveys to hack people's bank accounts, thereby stealing money from the respective accounts. By having access to people's personal data, hackers are better positioned to retrieve and use it for their personal gain. In practical terms some surveys require an individual to fill personal details such as phone number, full names as it appears in national ID, and other details, which can be used to swap the individual sim cards. As a consequence, participants' life are put under financial risks.

In conclusion, although some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world for more accurate results, I think some data is too important or too valuable to be shared freely because it can put respondents' financial accounts in danger.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The student addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—the benefits of sharing scientific and academic information and the risks associated with disclosing valuable data—and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Ideas are extended and supported, such as when the writer exemplifies medical research into COVID-19 and discusses the dangers of online surveys leading to compromised bank accounts. However, the interpretation of 'business and the academic world' in the prompt leans heavily towards personal data and hackers in the body paragraphs, which slightly narrows the scope of the second viewpoint. Nonetheless, the position is well-maintained throughout, aligning strongly with the Band 7 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response presents a clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Each paragraph has a clear central topic, starting with an introductory stance, moving into the benefits of sharing information, addressing the opposing view regarding security risks, and concluding effectively. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well, with transition phrases like 'A particularly noteworthy benefit', 'Nevertheless', and 'In conclusion' guiding the reader through the argument. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. While some cohesive relationships could be slightly tighter, the overall structure demonstrates clear logical development and places the writing squarely in the Band 7 range.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate to sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'noteworthy benefit', 'over-generalise' concepts, and 'financial risks'. There are occasional inaccuracies in word choice or collocation, for example, writing 'can be risk' instead of 'can be a risk' and 'participants' life are put' instead of 'lives are put'. Despite these minor slips, the vocabulary allows the message to be communicated clearly without impeding the reader, making Band 6.0 an appropriate score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writer employs a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, successfully using subordinate clauses and conditional structures like 'if researchers are given more facts, they are likely to make more precise conclusions'. There are some grammatical errors present, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('participants' life are put' and 'some surveys require... to fill personal details' instead of 'fill in') and missing articles ('carry out a research'). However, these errors do not impede communication, and the overall control of grammar and sentence structures reflects a solid Band 6 performance.

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