Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern world information is a senstive topic to discuss and every person have other on opinion on that. some of indiviual agreed with that every information is normal thing to shared freely and others thing is good thing to be confidancial.according to me its not a right path to provide your scienfic research ,busniess and the academic world.

first of all i agreed on that not sharing infromation about anything untill you are not 100%sure about the person. such as bank detail or any of your personal information its is very dangerous if hecker or any other person use thar detail to destroy your career and also you can lost your hardworking money.on the other side if we took an international example every country have their on code,rule and military information they can not share these type of information freely as a result other country can misuse these information to harm your people and destory your country.

secondly we will talk about sharing vital information about normal thing is compelety fine.recently two countries having fight with each other and we got news about that its easy for us to prepare ourself for what is going to expensive and how we deal these kind od problem and save money and food for furture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response responds to the task only minimally and fails to reach the required word count, falling short of the 250-word minimum by 36 words. While the writer attempts to discuss both views regarding information sharing and offers a basic personal opinion, the ideas remain underdeveloped and superficial. For example, the mention of bank details and national security is introduced briefly without sufficient elaboration or clear connection to the specific domains of scientific research, business, and academia requested in the prompt. The overall argument lacks depth and fails to address all parts of the prompt adequately, keeping the response at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organisation and progression of ideas are basic and lack a clear, logical overall structure. Although the student attempts to use transition markers such as 'first of all' and 'secondly', information and ideas are not arranged coherently, making the response difficult to follow in places. Paragraphing is attempted, but transitions between sentences and paragraphs are frequently faulty or mechanical, which disrupts the flow of the argument. Referencing and logical sequencing are weak, particularly in the final paragraph where the link between global news, personal budgeting, and the topic of information sharing is unclear and confusing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, employing a limited range of words appropriate for the task. There are frequent spelling and word-form errors that strain the reader, such as 'senstive', 'indiviual', 'confidancial', 'scienfic', 'busniess', 'hecker', 'thar', and 'compelety'. Word choice is often inaccurate, as seen in phrases like 'hardworking money' instead of 'hard-earned money'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a very basic meaning, the high density of lexical errors prevents the writing from achieving a higher level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, relying primarily on simple and frequently faulty sentence structures. Errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence construction are frequent and often distort meaning, such as in the opening sentence 'every person have other on opinion on that'. There are persistent problems with subject-verb agreement ('every person have', 'country have their on code'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and run-on sentences lacking appropriate punctuation. Complex sentence forms are rarely attempted correctly, leading to frequent errors that cause difficulty and confusion for the reader throughout the response.

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