Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals think that it is great to share as much data as possible in scientific research,business and the study world. Others claim that many information is too significant or too valuable to be shared openly.I would strongly say my opinion in information is a valuable asset to everyone by their personal data.This thing need to concern more to protect from others.

People who are being great successor in their life they live with peaceful but that formula want to know to other people.Because then only they may also be great in the future.These should may shared by a person who acheives everything he can shares to everyone.For example, a person got centum in his mathematic subject he can share strategies and tips to his friends.Whereas, if anyone student got failed in the mathematic subject he may ask doubts to that person who got centum.Additionally, he may tells the secret about how he got centum in his paper.Furthermore, this is the great assist to a person who wants to achieve a particular target.They may have a chance to know other people data like how they are being great any plans and features are there.This could may ask by anyone to the persons who got success.

People data are the most vital asset for them to hiding from unathorized persons.Because, their information leaked or telling to an unknown person it is not good for them.Additionally, they need to secure from both documentary through files and also, digital source they need to upload their significant files.For an instance, a person working in a TCS company at bangaluru he needs to share company profit list to his manager if he sends without password through whatsapp, email application may be hackers, or a unkown person can trying to figure the data.Moreover, that is an organization asset if it crash in the online that employee will face layoff or fire on that moment.Furthermore, authorization want to make proper protection with strong unique password to each files in both physical doucments and online folders

In genrally, good stuff revealing is not bad for them such in academics, busniess idea because they may get greater on that.However, private organizations are have more clients information and also company relevent histories which are all important to them.If any small data passed to strangers may effect more by hackers,onine theif.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a preference for protecting personal information, while also recognising that sharing academic strategies can help others. The example of a high-achieving student sharing mathematics tips is relevant, as is the company-data example. However, your position is difficult to interpret in the introduction: “information is a valuable asset to everyone by their personal data” does not clearly explain when sharing is beneficial or when it should be restricted. The discussion also shifts from the task’s broad contexts of science, business and academia to personal data and cybersecurity, leaving scientific research and the benefits of open research largely unexplored. Develop a clear, consistent opinion and explain both sides with more precise reasons and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with separate paragraphs for sharing, protecting information and a concluding summary. Examples generally follow the points they are meant to illustrate. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from success to exam results, asking questions and sharing personal data without clearly connecting each step. Linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” are repeated, sometimes where the relationship between ideas is not clear. The conclusion introduces a useful contrast but does not fully resolve the position stated earlier. To improve, organise each body paragraph around one main claim, explain it, then give a directly relevant example; use referencing and transitions to show the precise relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “valuable asset,” “unauthorized persons,” “significant files” and “strong unique password.” However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “data,” “person” and “great,” and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “great successor” appears to mean a successful person, while “company relevant histories” and “online thief” are unclear in context. Spelling errors such as “acheives,” “unathorized,” “genrally” and “busniess” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check word forms and spelling; for instance, distinguish confidential company records from information that can be shared openly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example, “if he sends without password through whatsapp, email application may be hackers,” but these structures are often faulty and obscure the intended meaning. Errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction: “they may tells,” “private organizations are have,” and “a unkown person can trying” are examples. Several sentences are fragments or have unclear clause relationships, including “Because then only they may also be great in the future.” Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, particularly around commas and full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “if” and “which.” Check each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb and complete meaning.

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