Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Any knowledge base information we can share easily that's not a bad habbits beacase when you share some information about your experience base knowledge to other known individual then you can achive some basic information that's can help you our self.

In my opinion, Here we can discuss about scientific research base knowledge that's a secret information about your work whose can not shared easily while business and academic information we can shared freely.We know that Business and academic knowledge is not a specific information about your work that's a basic reason whose describe the recent statement that's mention in a last previouse sentense.In addition, when we describe these type of information so we gets more knowledge about our field.For instance,few days ago my friend harry was very busy in specific task that's was not resolve by this man, However when he shared some essential knowledge about our topic to our friends then his very helpful for this our self.

On the otherhand,in scientific research base information is very vital for researcher because when you share it with other even known person then you can condupt any laws against activity.For Example, I was read some story that fully depends on scientific knowledge However in this story one scientist was share some knowledge about your research paper to other known person then was regrut because this activity effected on him at the end.

In conclusion, I think some information is not able to share other person becasue he is a secret for your self or your scientific knowledge.On the other side some information about your business and academic are shared with other person rather then scientific knowledge.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You attempt to discuss both sides and give a personal view, especially in the conclusion: some scientific information should remain private, while business and academic knowledge can be shared. However, the distinction is not fully explained or consistently supported. The opening suggests sharing knowledge is generally beneficial, but the body then treats business and academic information as basic and scientific research as secret without clarifying why these categories differ. The examples about Harry and an unnamed scientist are difficult to follow and do not clearly demonstrate the consequences of sharing valuable information. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and risks on both sides, then support your position with specific, relevant examples and maintain a clear stance throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs about sharing and protecting information, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “In addition,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and some links are mechanical or confusing. For example, “that's a basic reason whose describe the recent statement” does not make the relationship between the ideas clear, while “On the otherhand” introduces a contrast but the preceding argument is not fully established. References such as “this activity” and “this our self” are also difficult to interpret. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, and make each example clearly support that point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “business,” “academic,” and “essential knowledge,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “experience base knowledge,” “conduct any laws against activity,” and “was regrut” are unclear or inappropriate in context. Spelling errors, including “beacase,” “achive,” and “previouse,” also reduce accuracy. Aim to use familiar words precisely before attempting more complex expressions, and check spelling and word forms carefully. For this topic, useful terms include “confidential research findings,” “intellectual property,” and “share expertise,” provided they fit the point you are making.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “when” and “because,” but control is limited and errors are frequent enough to make several sentences hard to follow. For example, “when you share some information … then you can achive some basic information that's can help you our self” has problems with clause structure, agreement, and pronoun reference. Verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “I was read” and “one scientist was share.” Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries need attention; for instance, “a secret information” and the run-on transition in “shared freely.We know” are not accurate. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking tense, agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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