Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

introduction:

people believe that it is good to share there information as possible in some scientific research and on the other hand some information are to much importantto value able be shared freely.

Overview:

in my personal opinion of this topic is that is a very good thing .in some time the people were face some difficulet issue they does not how they deail this section they have share our problem with our friends and some thime there friend have already face the isssue they khow how thwy can solve the problem the friend have giving some ideas ho they san deail the seutation. it is a very good habit you can share our problem with our closed friend but in case they have does not deal the problem they have give ahope one they the time will be go. it is the biggest hope from those people. and on the other hand they feel a very relise to share our problem.the secound part of this pessage is the some information to important or to valuable to be shared freely.some people have does not a feel very good thing to share our personal issues for other person so they feel very dipressed and they does not know. how they can deail our issues.so my personail opinion of this topis is that you can feel freely to share our issues with our family and friend that is very closed to you.

Conclusion:

we have discusses all the passages we have reached this result. some information shared to feel freely is a nery good habit but some the so have does not share from our family issue for other persion it not a good habit. so my personal decission of this topic is that you can share our issues with our closed friend to feel freely. but some our family issue that does not discusses our friend.it is not a good habit.becouse its your personal issues you can solve own. At this time you can belive our self.you san easy face our issues

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a personal view—that sharing problems with close friends or family can be helpful—and you refer to the opposing idea that some information should not be shared. However, the response largely shifts the question from sharing scientific, business, and academic information to sharing personal problems. As a result, it does not adequately discuss either view in the context required by the task, and the examples about friends offering advice do not support the topic. Your position is present but is not clearly connected to the issue of valuable or sensitive research and professional information. To improve, address both views directly, for example by discussing how open research can benefit society and how commercial or confidential information may need protection, then explain your own position with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response has an introduction, a main section, and a conclusion, and phrases such as “on the other hand” show an attempt to signal contrast. However, the main section is difficult to follow because it repeats the idea of sharing personal problems and moves between points without a clear progression. The labels “Overview” and “the second part of this passage” do not create a logical structure, and the conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than drawing together a discussion of the two views. References such as “they” and “our issues” are also unclear at times. Organise the essay into focused paragraphs—one for each view and one for your opinion—and use linking phrases to show how each idea relates to the task.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use a small set of relevant general expressions, including “share,” “personal opinion,” “valuable,” and “freely,” so the basic topic of sharing is recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, particularly because “issues” and “problem” are used in place of the task’s ideas about research, business information, and academic knowledge. Several spelling and word-form errors, such as “difficulet,” “dipressed,” and “personail,” make the text harder to read. Some phrases, including “feel a very relise,” do not communicate a clear meaning. Build a topic-specific vocabulary set and check spelling and collocations; this will help you express the two positions more accurately and avoid repeating the same general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “on the other hand” and “so,” and you use some simple sentence forms. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to interpret, and control of basic grammar is inconsistent. Examples include “some information are,” “they does not how,” and “the friend have giving,” which show problems with agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. Articles, pronouns, and punctuation are also frequently unclear, as in “you can share our problem” and the full stops placed within sentences. These errors often make the intended relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using correctly formed clauses and consistent pronouns.

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