Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is arugued that people should have easy access to know more information about the scientific research, business and the academic word. While others argue that valuable information should not share with people for free of cost. Both views has its own benefits and drawbacks. I belive that important information should have some valuable price to gain access to it.

One the one hand, proponents belive that easy avalibility of information to people help to develop

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies both sides of the debate and gives a personal view: “important information should have some valuable price to gain access to it.” This is relevant to the question, but the discussion is only begun; the first supporting point ends abruptly at “help to develop,” and there is no explanation of why information should be shared or protected, nor any examples. The opposing view is mentioned in the opening but not developed. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, so it cannot demonstrate a complete discussion or adequately support its position. To improve, explain each view in a separate developed paragraph, give a relevant example, and conclude by clarifying your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the two positions and your opinion, and “One the one hand” signals the start of a supporting paragraph. These markers give the reader some sense of direction. However, the response stops mid-sentence, so there is no progression through both views or a conclusion, and the relationship between ideas is not developed. The phrase “Both views has its own benefits and drawbacks” announces a comparison but does not explain it. Build a clear sequence with one paragraph for each view, followed by a conclusion, and use linking expressions to show how each reason supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “valuable information,” “access,” and “benefits and drawbacks,” which makes the subject identifiable. However, the range is narrow because the response is very brief, and several spelling or word-choice errors reduce accuracy: “arugued,” “word” for “world,” “belive,” and “avalibility.” The phrase “free of cost” is also less natural in this context than “free of charge.” Aim to check spelling carefully and use precise terms for the ideas you develop, such as “open access,” “intellectual property,” or “commercially sensitive information.” More developed arguments would also give you opportunities to demonstrate a broader vocabulary range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a complex contrast in the opening with “While others argue…,” and the sentence “I believe that important information should have…” communicates a clear position. However, the contrast clause is not joined to a complete main clause, and there are errors in agreement and verb patterns: “Both views has” should use a plural verb, while “information should not share” needs a passive form. “Easy availability of information to people help” also has a subject–verb agreement problem. The short response provides little evidence of varied sentence structures, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise complete sentences, passive constructions, and agreement, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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