Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individuals believe that it is fine to divide the information as much as possible in scientific field, economic industries and educational platform. While a group of people argue that few information is much compulsory to distribute freely. In this case, I strongly believe that information is not the thing to share freely due to national security, geopolitics, economic values and data protection.

First of all information is not a common thing which can be distribute freely among people and that is the firm believe of some individuals. The main reason behind their thinking is that national security and data protection. A government starts a project about their national army than it is not important to share this information among their public because there are many agents of enemy countries in every region.

Others think that it is important to be shared among their public. In their point of view it is necessary to be aware of every situation. For example, a virus like covid19 is the information that can not be hide from people because in this case people could die by not aware of this disease. Another circumstance is the storm and weather update. So, that are the common reasons their thinking.

In my opinion, I believe that information cannot be shared freely because government should know what is to share with their public and what's not. An information about medical field experiments, economic industries and national security should not be distribute freely because at the end it will come in loss.

Industries are aware about the national circumstances so, they should know what to do next.

In conclusion, I firmly stand by the data should not be divided by among the public it will be result in loss of some departments like data leaks and economic crisis.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both positions and state a clear preference for restricting access, citing national security and data protection. The examples of a military project, COVID-19 information and weather warnings are relevant and show awareness that some information may need to be shared for public safety. However, the discussion is only partial: the case for sharing information is briefly described, and your own position is repeated more than it is explained. The claim that medical research and economic information should not be shared is broad and needs qualification—for example, distinguishing confidential commercial data from findings that benefit public health. Develop each view with a reason and a specific example, then explain how you balance openness against legitimate restrictions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion, and the reader can identify the two views and your opinion. Paragraphing broadly separates these functions. However, progression within and between paragraphs is limited, and several links are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “Others think that it is important to be shared” does not clearly identify what “it” refers to, while “So, that are the common reasons their thinking” does not smoothly conclude the example. The final paragraph repeats the position without drawing together the discussion. Use clearer topic sentences, refer explicitly to “information,” and connect each example to the point it supports. A more balanced sequence—one paragraph for each view, followed by a reasoned conclusion—would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “national security,” “data protection,” “economic values” and “data leaks,” so the subject is generally clear. There is also an attempt to use more formal expressions such as “In my opinion” and “In conclusion.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the writing awkward, such as “divide the information,” “few information,” “common reasons their thinking” and “come in loss.” Repetition of “information,” “share” and “important” also restricts precision. Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing access and confidentiality, and check whether nouns are countable and whether verbs naturally combine with their objects. This would make your meaning clearer and more academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a conditional example about people dying if they are unaware of a disease. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. Examples include “which can be distribute freely,” “a government starts a project … than it is not important,” and “should not be distribute freely”; these show problems with verb forms and sentence construction. There are also errors in articles, agreement and punctuation, as in “An information” and “So, that are.” Practise forming accurate passive constructions and conditional sentences, and proofread each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb and complete clause.

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