Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is believed that sharing every information is a good thing as it can lead to new scintific breakouts, better business management and more bright minds in the area of academic. While some people thinks that there are some information which should be kept as private as possible. I agree with the second statement, because sharing too much information can cause damage to oneself. As it is a good deed to share new information, it is not always a wise choice to share everything with everyone.

On one hand, sharing information can lead to new scintific discoveries, getting much beneficial bussiness deals, and in academic it can create more successful students. For instance, if a scientist has a onging project and sharing the details with his team, the project can be completed in less time. Similarly, in businesses sharing can land you a better opportuanity. Consiquently, students can create good relationships with eachother by sharing information, both formal and informal.

On the other hand, sharing too much information can lead to your own downfall. There are some piece of informations which should be highly coded, an information which is safe when not many people know about. Sharing too much can make you look like a clown. For example, in scientific world sharing information about your research can get your work stolen. Same for the businesses, sharing too much information increases the risk of you rival or competetion bussiness to steal your deals or ideas. In addition it can be armful for the future of your company.

In conclusion, sharing information is not a bad thing, it counts as a good deed. However, oversharing is a big problem. It can steal your light and throw in into shadows, while someone else will get your spark.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for keeping some information private: “I agree with the second statement.” The discussion of sharing is relevant, with examples involving a scientist’s team, business opportunities, and students. You also explain risks such as research being stolen and competitors taking ideas. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. The academic example about students forming relationships is less directly connected to sharing valuable research, and the claim that oversharing can “make you look like a clown” does not clearly explain the harm. Develop each side with more precise reasoning and make your own position more explicit in the conclusion, including when sharing is beneficial and when protection is justified.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On one hand” and “On the other hand” make the contrast easy to follow, and examples generally appear alongside the point they support. This meets the lower-band expectation for coherent organisation and shows some of the clearer progression associated with a stronger performance. However, links between ideas can feel mechanical, and some references are unclear: “an information which is safe when not many people know about” does not specify what information is meant. The conclusion’s image of “steal your light” and “get your spark” is not clearly connected to the preceding argument. Use more precise transitions and ensure each sentence develops the paragraph’s central point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific discoveries,” “research,” “competitors,” and “ideas,” so the main argument is understandable. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “your own downfall,” but the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate. Examples include “every information,” “beneficial business deals,” “highly coded,” and “steal your light”; these can make the meaning imprecise or sound unnatural. Spelling errors such as “scintific,” “bussiness,” and “opportuanity” are noticeable. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing confidentiality, intellectual property, and collaboration, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including a concession structure in “While some people thinks…” and a conditional example beginning “if a scientist has…”. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors occur across the response. For example, “some people thinks” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “if a scientist has a onging project and sharing the details” shifts awkwardly between verb forms. Articles and countability also need attention in phrases such as “a onging project” and “some piece of informations.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are generally understandable, though the opening uses a fragment-like “While” clause. Practise agreement, articles, and parallel verb forms, then proofread each sentence for a complete, consistent structure.

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