Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

According to my personal belief, The people who believe that it is good to share information as much as possible in scientific research business, and the academic world are absolutely right. The information in academic world can help more students to understand certain things or topics more deeply and thoroughly.

While sharing every information in scientific researches can help the researchers and scientists to publish a better and detailed researchers, The inventions which can help our country, it's people and our society. With our information the products of businesses can help solve our multiple daily tasks and problems.

However, sharing too much information which can misrupt our privacy or our private life, family and credit details is not healthy and can lead to various scams, violations.

So, sharing the information is good. But, sharing our private and sensitive information is not safe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear preference for sharing information, then acknowledge a concern about privacy, so both sides are touched on. However, the discussion is very brief and does not adequately address the task’s specific contexts: the privacy examples shift away from valuable scientific, business, or academic information, and the benefits are asserted rather than explained with relevant examples. Your own position is present, but the reasons and support are limited, which leaves the response only partially developed. The response contains 132 words, below the required 250; 10 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from that count. To improve, explain why open research or business information benefits society, why some knowledge may need protection, and support each point with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an opening position, a paragraph about the benefits of sharing, a contrast introduced by “However,” and a concluding view. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited, and the links between ideas are sometimes unclear. For example, the sentence beginning “While sharing every information…” does not complete its opening clause clearly, and the move from research to business products is abrupt. The conclusion largely repeats the opening rather than drawing the discussion together. Use separate, focused paragraphs for each view, connect each claim to its explanation, and use clear references so the reader can follow how each example supports your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “inventions,” “privacy,” “sensitive information,” and “scams,” which helps communicate the general topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “misrupt our privacy,” “a better and detailed researchers,” and “solve our multiple daily tasks.” These expressions make parts of the argument difficult to interpret precisely. There is also repetition of “information” and “sharing.” Build a more precise set of topic-related phrases, such as “make research findings publicly available,” “protect commercially sensitive data,” and “advance scientific knowledge.” Check collocations and word forms when revising, and choose terms that distinguish private personal data from valuable research or business information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some sentence variety, including a contrast introduced by “While” and a complex sentence with “which,” and the main position is generally understandable. However, the range remains limited, and attempts at longer structures are often faulty. “While sharing every information …” is left without a clear main clause, while “The inventions which can help our country…” is a sentence fragment. There are also errors in articles, agreement, and punctuation, including “in academic world” and the capitalised “The” after a comma. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses only when their grammatical connection is secure. Proofread articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation.

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