Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many poeple thinks that its great to spread maximum knowledge related to sceince, business and academic domain in their surroundings. However, others want to share selected data that would be extremely vital and needs society attention.

On one hand, people like to gave details they came to know to others and thinks that other can also get benefits from it for example, freind of mine share financial advice to invest money in stock market which help me alot to choose funds and assist me to gave ideas and authentic resources to rely on but he also share his lifestyle which is irrelvant to me and watch his content to make him satisied.

On the other hand, social media is full of information where it gets really hard to filter required knowledge from which one can get benefit let suppose person is sharing news about evolution of life or share statistics showing students daily activities in 90s. These informations are not giving me any advantage to make decisions wisely or they are not current trends which one should know.These leads to time wastage and lower the productivity.

In my opinion, People should share only important data that could be beneficial for others and they feel more awared to the world for example its really healthy to share knowledge about best ideas to invest or how many top universities are there for students in their region or it can be usefull techniques for physical fitness. One should share selected information only who they think can add value to their friends and family other wise people loose interest and dont want to look into information they share with them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for sharing only information that benefits others. The examples about investment advice and useful health or education information help make your position relevant. However, the discussion of the first view is not fully aligned with the question: the friend’s lifestyle content is not an example of scientific, business, or academic information being shared, and the point about irrelevant social-media posts shifts attention from the value of sharing research. The opposing view is also presented mainly as a concern about information overload, rather than explaining why some research or business information may be too valuable or sensitive to release freely. Develop that distinction and support both sides more directly to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs beginning “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding opinion. This makes the main direction easy to follow. The examples also give the paragraphs some internal development. However, connections between ideas are sometimes mechanical, and the long first body paragraph moves from investment advice to a friend’s lifestyle without a clear link to the debate. In the second paragraph, “These” does not clearly refer to a specific noun, and the conclusion repeats the idea of sharing useful information rather than drawing the discussion together. Use clearer referencing and organise each paragraph around one directly relevant reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “financial advice,” “stock market,” “filter,” “productivity,” and “universities,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors reduce precision, such as “maximum knowledge,” “selected data,” “society attention,” and “lower the productivity.” Some expressions are also vague, including “details they came to know” and “best ideas to invest.” Aim for more precise language connected to the prompt, such as research findings, commercially sensitive information, or academic knowledge, and check spelling and natural word combinations. These improvements would make your arguments clearer and more appropriate to an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and “where,” and you use paragraph-opening phrases to organise the argument. However, errors in sentence structure and basic grammar are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “Many poeple thinks” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “people like to gave details” uses an incorrect verb form. In “These informations are not giving me,” the plural noun and verb construction are problematic, and several sentences run together without clear punctuation. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms after “to,” and sentence boundaries before adding more complex clauses. Proofreading each sentence for one main clause will help improve control.

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