Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Around the globe, many people believe that sharing valuable information is good paractice, while others believes that it is not to be shared freely. This essay will discuss both views and opinions of sharing valuable information on scientfic research and business.

On the one hand, it is good approach to sharing information insight to others people. Like, people get scientfic research from you free of cost, that will help them in their future. According to a survey conducted by private organization in pakistan 54% people are more creative who get free practical information from others without any paractical work.On the other hand, people had to be paid by others who want samo valuable information regarding business and academic world. This is because, information is a valuable thing in this world. A researcher in pakistan sell his research work to the studentes for their assignments.

In my opinion, people should paid for valuable information because it is a key for success in this world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both sides of the issue and give a clear personal view: you support charging for valuable information. However, the discussion is only minimal and does not fully explain the arguments in the prompt. The point that free research may help people “in their future” is vague, while the example about a researcher selling work to students is not explained or connected clearly to why information should be protected. The response also does not develop the scientific, business, and academic contexts with relevant detail. The stated minimum length is not met, which leaves too little space to explain and support your ideas. Develop each view with a reason and a specific, relevant example, then explain your own position more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting two contrasting views, and a concluding opinion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In my opinion” help readers recognise the intended direction. However, the two sides are placed in one body paragraph, and the progression within it is difficult to follow: the survey claim and the example of selling research are introduced without enough explanation. Some links between sentences are also unclear, such as the connection between free information and future benefits. Use separate paragraphs for the two views, and connect each example explicitly to its supporting reason. This would make the organisation more consistent and reduce the impression of ideas being listed rather than developed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “valuable information,” “scientific research,” “business,” and “academic world,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make the writing less natural, such as “good paractice,” “information insight to others people,” and “free of cost.” Repetition of “information” and “valuable” also limits precision. Aim to use accurate phrases such as “share research findings,” “access information freely,” and “protect commercially sensitive data.” Check spelling carefully, especially in key topic words, and choose expressions that fit the intended meaning rather than translating phrases directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and a longer sentence beginning “This is because,” but the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently. For example, “others believes” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “it is good approach” is missing an article. In “people should paid,” the verb form is incorrect; “people had to be paid by others who want” also shifts awkwardly between past and present. Some sentence boundaries and punctuation are missing, notably before “On the other hand” and around the survey example, which makes parts harder to read. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb patterns, then build longer sentences using clear clauses and punctuation.

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