Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is commonly believed by some individuals that sharing more information of scientific research, busniess and the academic world is a good approach. While, others believe that some analysis is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. The government should make a research department and to supervise these research and publish them for the people.

In modern world, industries and other educational institutes are implenting or changing there polices, and there main aim is to bring a change by research and analysis. Many organizations has already taken benefits from this and are trying there best by investing more and more money and their resources in research. In a result it would benefit there producation. For example, in KPK the government recently mentioned that businesses that are new to markets are investing more and more money on research, by providing necessary equipments and tools to the universities and other eduactional institutes. Consequently, the research and findings comes from these analysis helps businesses to reduce there costs on products and make better product on low cost. Furthermore, there are many collages in china which only focuses on research only instead of theoritical studies. Additionaly There policies are very stirct and they did not allow any student to graduate with out any creative research. As a result there students are creative scientists in very less age and they are well known as smarter generation

in the whole world.

However, there are some medical and geo graphical fields in which research is very important, and many authorities are well known for thier good approch of sharing and publishing these analysis without any cost. For example, Lady reading hospital which is totally based on research and findings assists other medical institutes to use there valuable research and make cure possible for every one. Moreover, there are some scientists in japan that are fully commited to bring change in the geo graphical world by introducing some rare kind of research and there aim is to reduce the harmful affects of climate change. Thus, every country is seeking to these scientist to take advantage from there research.

In conclusion, the government should make a seperate department to confirm the on going processes in the research and diagnoses, to help the people in studies and in other educational way.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to discuss both the benefits of sharing research and the value of making findings available, using examples from business, universities, hospitals and climate research. However, the two views are not clearly distinguished: the second body paragraph mainly gives further reasons to share research, rather than explaining why some information should remain protected. The opening mentions that some information is valuable, but this point is not developed, and the conclusion recommends government supervision without clearly stating a position on what should be shared freely. Several examples are also difficult to interpret or insufficiently explained. To strengthen the response, explain both sides directly, develop a consistent opinion, and connect each example explicitly to the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraph openings “In modern world” and “However” signal an intended structure. Examples are generally grouped by topic, which gives the reader some sense of organisation. Nevertheless, progression is unclear because the paragraph beginning “However” continues to support sharing rather than presenting the opposing view. Linking phrases such as “As a result,” “Furthermore” and “Consequently” are used repeatedly, sometimes without a clear cause-and-effect relationship. References such as “these analysis” and “there research” also make it difficult to identify what is being discussed. Organise each body paragraph around one distinct viewpoint, and use clearer references and more precise links between claims and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “research,” “findings,” “investing,” “resources,” “climate change” and “harmful effects,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “make a research department” and “research and diagnoses” do not express the intended ideas naturally, while “smarter generation” is vague in this context. Spelling errors such as “busniess,” “implenting” and “eduactional” are also noticeable. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing access and ownership of information, and check spelling and common word partnerships during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use complex sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “Consequently, the research and findings comes from these analysis helps businesses…” and “there are some scientists in japan that are fully commited…”. These attempts show an effort to connect ideas, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors can make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent (“organizations has,” “findings comes”), and articles, plurals and possessives are frequently mishandled. Some sentences also contain several clauses without clear grammatical control, while punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking agreement and sentence boundaries.

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