Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In this day and age of the global connectivity where information is freely available for everyone and easily accessible, anyone with a smart device and internet connection can look up anything with the simple click of a button. While the information is just that, it depends upon the user and his moral compass how he decides to use that either for the betterment or the desolation of community.

There is one school of thought that says that all the scientific information should be freely accessible for everyone at all times. All the research being carried out in the world should be shared freely with peers and the community to make the world a safer and better place.Be it scientific research into new medication, cures, medical break throughs or buisness models and ideas, they should be readily accessible so that every community can profit from it and prosper. And in an ideal world free of greed, war and insatiability, this would be perfect. Free flow of information will let everyone to anticipate and prepare for the hurdles lying ahead.

The second school of thought is critically against this notion. They have called it many things throughout history like a child's dream, a fool's play and some idiot's mental breakdown. They think that not all information needs to be available to the masses. Some research work and ideas are so dangerous, that they need to be kept hidden for the sake of humanity. Same is the case in buisness world. Accrding to them, if all the buisness analytics are shared with others, the markets will spiral into freefall and economy will collapse. These groups rally to stop the free flow of information and only want a select few to hold it for the time being.

We live in a world, where idiocricy, foolhardiness, greed and rage are brewing at an alarming rate between the communities, races and even inside countries. Everyone is trying to surpass and doesn't care what destruction lies the wake. In this age of scientific research and freedom of speech, I am not against supressing information. But there needs to be compartmentalization. If everyone can access the prints for a portable 3D printer handgun, the sequence to the genetic code of a potentially deadly virus or bioweapon or even the plans to short and destabilize the trade market, the world will succumb to chaos in a matter of days.There nust be a filter for the people to access information. It doesn't mean, we should stop innovation, But infomation in the hands of an idiot or a mentally unstable person can be a very dangerous thing. It could harm individuals and communities which could prove fatal and may not recover for years to come. So I am in the favor of information compartmentalization, and certain things should only be accessible to an individual if and when deemed necessary and prudent.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address both views and make your own position clear: you support sharing useful research while arguing that dangerous or strategically sensitive information should be restricted. The examples of medical discoveries, a 3D-printed handgun, a virus sequence and market manipulation make the discussion relevant, and your conclusion follows from this position. This fits a response that covers the task and develops its main ideas. However, some claims are broad rather than carefully supported—for example, that sharing business analytics would make markets collapse, or that the world could descend into chaos within days. The first viewpoint also receives less qualification than the case for restricting information. Explain the conditions under which openness benefits society, and distinguish credible risks from more sweeping predictions to develop the argument further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a final paragraph stating your position. The progression from general access to the competing arguments and then to your own proposal is easy to follow. You also use signposting such as “The second school of thought” and “But there needs to be compartmentalization.” This meets the expectation of coherent organisation, with some effective progression. However, the repeated “school of thought” framing and several long, accumulating sentences make parts feel mechanical or crowded. The final paragraph combines multiple examples and conclusions without enough separation, while “it” in “use that” has an unclear reference. Use clearer topic sentences, divide dense sentences, and make references explicit to improve cohesion and approach a more consistently flexible flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including terms such as “free flow of information,” “compartmentalization,” “genetic code,” and “destabilize the trade market.” These choices help convey the debate and show attempts at more specialised vocabulary. At times, however, word choice and collocation are inaccurate or overly dramatic: “desolation of community,” “a fool’s play,” and “the plans to short and destabilize the trade market” are not natural or precise in context. There are also spelling errors, including “buisness,” “Accrding,” “idiocricy,” “nust,” and “infomation.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce control. Prefer conventional academic phrasing and proofread carefully, especially for repeated topic words and technical terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including conditional structures such as “If everyone can access the prints … the world will succumb to chaos” and a concession in “I am not against … But there needs to be…”. Meaning is generally clear, and the response shows some control of sentence construction. Some grammatical and punctuation errors remain, however. For example, “Free flow of information will let everyone to anticipate” uses an incorrect verb pattern; “Same is the case in buisness world” is missing an article; and “It doesn't mean, we should stop innovation, But…” has faulty comma use and capitalisation. Several sentences also run together after full stops, as in “place.Be it” and “days.There”. Review verb patterns, articles, and sentence boundaries, then edit punctuation to make the complex sentences more accurate.

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