Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

For some peoples, it is necessery to shares informations withe itche aders in mater to succede a human devlopmente, they tryto leade the humanity to a pathe of respecte and hope .

in the othere hand , we find people thaath see thath some informations muste stay secreate and be revealde only for the personse thathe udit properly, in they pointe of veiw not evry human have gthe capaassity of undersstanding the value of an in formation and thats it it is more safe to hide an informations for peaple like thath.

In my pointe of view im withe the second opinion because in humans society it is clearly impossible to predicte a human reaction aboite an information thath is very valuble , always the humans love to gaine profite of evreating evene if it cause danger on their own life for some of theme a quique profit it more important than a later ponichmente for thath is important to ceap valuble informations oit of theire handes

Insstade we musgt give this cinde of informationd to cainde of people thath can used propely lik scientiste and also governors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides by contrasting open sharing with keeping valuable information secret, and your position is identifiable: you support restricting access, especially in the sentence beginning “In my point of view.” However, the discussion remains partial and under-developed. The benefits of sharing scientific or academic findings are not explained, and the risks of sharing are asserted rather than illustrated with a specific example. Your final suggestion that information should go to scientists and governors adds a relevant point, but it needs explanation. The response also does not meet the 250-word minimum, which limits how fully you can develop both views. Extend each side with a reason and a concrete example, then explain why your preferred approach is stronger.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the opening introduces the two positions, a separate paragraph presents your opinion, and the final sentence proposes limiting access to qualified people. Basic signposting such as “On the other hand” and “In my point of view” helps readers follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to track because several ideas are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences. The contrast between sharing and secrecy is not developed in a clear sequence, and the final paragraph is too brief to function as a conclusion. Use one paragraph for each view, followed by a conclusion, and connect each claim to its explanation with clear referencing and linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific,” “valuable information,” “humanity,” and “scientists,” and the reader can generally identify your main argument. However, the usable range is limited, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word forms make meaning difficult to access—for example, “necessery,” “informations,” “secreate,” and “valuble.” Some expressions are also unclear or unnatural, such as “a unique profit” and “a later punishment,” so the intended meaning is not always precise. Build a reliable set of topic collocations, such as “share research findings,” “protect commercially sensitive data,” and “restrict access,” and check spelling and word forms carefully. Clear, accurate vocabulary will help your ideas sound more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express connected and complex ideas, particularly in the long sentence beginning “In my point of view,” and you use basic contrast structures. However, the range of sentence patterns is limited, and attempts to join several clauses often produce faulty or unclear sentences. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are frequent; for example, “it is necessery to shares” and “not evry human have” show problems with verb agreement and form. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, making some sentences hard to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them using accurate conjunctions. Check subject–verb agreement and singular/plural forms during revision.

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