Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are two types of people who share their knowledge and information about scientific research,business and the academic world. some others believe that some informations is too important or valuable that would be shared freely among other people.Now a days, some things were made delicate from study to scientific research.So, i believe that sharing knowledge was the biggest blessing in this era. On the one side,some people shares their knowledge in scientific reasearch and academic world because some informations were too difficult to explain and according to our fellows, we would be collaborated of all the moderate information and combine them to make the things more valuable and beneficial so some persons share their opninions and point of views and consider them a unique way to transform the information in easiet way.

On the other side,specially in the biological field some presentations were too difficult and important and we covered them in no time. So, in this way. the universities teaching staff made the group in which fellows share their discovery and knowledge about important thing.As we all know about the Biotechnology field and we admired them a unique and fascinating field.it briefly explains the knowledge of cell life and it develops how embryology and technology combine to develop human life. on this information it would be important for all the fellows point of views.

From my perspective, i agreed with that some people believe that it is too important to share valuable key points which help everyone in presentation or even examinations.Group work oftens successful when information is lengthy and important because it combine them with all their point of views.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear preference for sharing information, particularly in the introduction and conclusion, and you attempt to discuss both sides. However, the two positions are not explained accurately or developed with relevant support. The first body paragraph suggests that people share information because it is difficult to explain and can be combined, while the second focuses on biology presentations and group work rather than explaining why valuable research or business information might be kept private. The example of biotechnology is also not clearly connected to either side of the debate. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits of open sharing and the reasons for protecting valuable information, such as commercial advantage or privacy, then support each with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On the one side” and “On the other side,” and a concluding opinion, so there is an attempt to organise the discussion. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not consistently develop distinct arguments, and several sentences contain loosely connected ideas. For example, the discussion moves from difficult presentations to universities forming groups and then to biotechnology without clearly showing how each point supports the paragraph’s main idea. Linking phrases such as “So” and “In this way” are sometimes used without a clear logical relationship. Give each paragraph one central claim, arrange its explanation and example in sequence, and use references that make the connections explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “valuable,” “discovery,” “Biotechnology,” and “embryology,” which shows an attempt to address an academic subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “made delicate from study,” “moderate information,” and “unique way to transform the information in easiet way.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “reasearch,” “opninions,” and “informations,” also reduce precision. Aim for familiar, accurate academic expressions rather than complicated phrases whose meaning is uncertain. For instance, describe information as “sensitive” or “commercially valuable,” and explain that researchers “share findings” or “protect intellectual property.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response is generally recognisable as a discussion. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, tense, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “some informations is,” “some people shares,” and “we would be collaborated”; these require different grammatical forms. The sentence beginning “As we all know about the Biotechnology field” is also incomplete or awkwardly joined to the following idea, while “So, in this way.” creates a fragment. Practise building complete sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses carefully. Check subject–verb agreement, use uncountable “information,” and review punctuation so that each sentence expresses a complete thought.

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