Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Numerous people think that sharing information as much as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world is good thing, while other Believe that the information which is too important or too valiable can not be shared freely. Although sharing information helps to understand thing more but the information that can impact in negative way is not approitate.

Spreading knowledge helps us to gain more knowledge as possible. Sharing information in scientific research will hepls people to understand about certain thing that the doing in their daily life like in workout, having knowledge of correct body posture, exercise and diet will improve you whole body. While in term of business it help to understand about how to manage assests, making more money through invested capital, encourage youth to do future investments. Furthermore exchangeing knowledge in your studies will improve you grades, your IQ and etc. Overall, share as much information is benifits to all.

On the other hand certain information which is confendital, create chaos or led to negative impact to someone life is not good thing. Moreover spreading fales information is not good thing to do freely for example, Nowaday media is become largest industry who spread fales and uncheck information and some people believe or trust on that provided information and sometimes it led to political trouble.

In my opinion its not about the right or wrong information, its about people intention that what they want to do with the information.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a personal opinion, so the response is relevant to the question. The first body paragraph explains benefits in research, business and education, while the second raises confidentiality and the risks of false information. However, these points are mostly asserted rather than developed with clear, specific examples, and the final opinion—that intention matters more than whether information is right or wrong—is not fully explained or reconciled with the two views. The response also does not meet the 250-word minimum: it contains 234 words, with 10 words copied from the task prompt excluded from the count. Develop each side further and explain your position more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for the benefits, one for concerns, and a concluding opinion. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Furthermore” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the examples about exercise, investment and grades are listed without showing how each supports the broader claim about sharing information. Some connections are also awkward, particularly the shift from confidential information to false media reports. The conclusion is very brief and does not draw together the discussion. Use clearer topic sentences, explain the link between examples and claims, and make the final paragraph summarise your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “confidential,” “political trouble” and “investments.” This gives you a basic range for discussing information and its effects. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate spellings or word choices make the message less clear, such as “valiable,” “approitate,” “fales” and “uncheck information.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “gain more knowledge as possible” and “impact to someone life.” Aim to learn accurate topic-related collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for privacy, misinformation and the commercial value of research would help you express the two sides more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast in the opening and a conditional-style example introduced by “for example.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For instance, “sharing information helps to understand thing more” lacks a clear subject for “understand,” while “it help to understand” has subject–verb agreement problems. Articles, plurals and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “is good thing,” “you whole body” and “media is become.” Practise building accurate sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then check agreement, articles and punctuation before adding more complex clauses.

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