Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

yes in my own life experience i have seen many of the people who believe that it is good to share their own information with other people.They say that in this perspective that if it will help other people to do researches and business, it is good.in my opinion It will students help them in the field of education for example information shared can help the students to do their educational activities effectively and easily.It can also help the employees to do thier business researches like a new employee of the organization can use the information shared by the organization on their websites, it will help him to get familiar with the organization's rules and regulations before joining the organizatin.Similar case happens with the reseachers for example a person did a research on a topic in past and now another person is doing such research on the same topic or same situation so he can use the information of that person if he allows.

On the other hand there are some people who think that they shouldn't allow others to use their information.I am also from one of them.In my opinion we shouldn't share our information with others as they can missuse our information.Moreover every person should have to experience the situation by himself and then he should have to collect the information by his own observations.Although sharing information with others can help them but if we don't do so then it will be more helpful to them as they will do their own obsevations and then they will collect information.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both perspectives and state your own view, particularly when you say that shared information can help students and employees, but that you also oppose sharing because it may be misused. These points are relevant, yet the response only partially develops the task: the benefits are illustrated in general terms, while the risks are asserted rather than explained with a specific example. The final claim that people learn more through their own observations also needs to be reconciled with your earlier support for sharing. To strengthen the response, explain when sharing is beneficial and when information should be protected, then make your position consistent and support it with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response first presents reasons for sharing and then introduces the opposing view with “On the other hand.” Examples about students, employees and researchers give the reader a basic sense of the intended progression. However, the first section is a long, crowded paragraph, and the ideas within it are not always clearly connected. Repeated phrases such as “in my opinion” and “for example,” along with unclear references such as “they” and “that person,” make the argument harder to follow. The conclusion is also absent, so your final position is not clearly brought together. Use separate paragraphs for each view and a short conclusion, with clearer links between each claim and its explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main topic, with relevant terms such as “research,” “organization,” “rules and regulations,” and “observations.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “information,” “help,” and “people.” Some choices are inaccurate or awkward, including “do researches,” “business researches,” and “missuse our information,” which can make the intended meaning less precise. Spelling errors such as “thier,” “organizatin,” “reseachers,” and “obsevations” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of topic-related expressions and check spelling carefully; for instance, distinguish between sharing research findings, protecting confidential data, and granting permission to use someone’s work.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use linking structures such as “Although” and “if,” but control is inconsistent. Several sentences contain faulty clause construction, as in “They say that in this perspective that if it will help other people,” and “every person should have to experience the situation.” Verb forms and agreement are also problematic: “it will students help them” and “a person did a research … and now another person is doing” do not form clear, accurate structures. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, with sentence beginnings such as “yes” and “in my opinion” left uncapitalised and several ideas joined by full stops or commas without clear boundaries. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking tense, word order and sentence boundaries.

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