Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I think it is very important to share to much information scinetist and reasearcher, business, and academic world, because this helps reasearcher to reasearch a particular topic and get knowledge easily and also get more benefits from the article that shared by scientist and it will become more productive and reasearcher need more analyze that shared information and to get better understanding on that particular topic and opprtunity to do innovation and reasearch furthermore on that particular topic.

And businessmen also apply these reasearch on their company and organization , how they apply on their business , they apply this on their business if a reasearch has about management, and business also need a management in to become successful , management has a 4 basic principles like leading , controlling, organizing and planning , suppose this information in this reasearch included , in the leading business should need be lead by a leader with more leadership qualities , and that busineesmen can learn these things from these reasearch if reasearch is about business and also learn other all thing same like that.

In the academic world students has opportunity to learn new concept and build new concepts , where new generation has better and good idea about new discovery and innovation .

Yes some informatiion i more valuable like now there is no proper treatment for cancer if a doctor has find antibiotic of cancer that must should need to share with government and public , because these type of information is very important and more valuable so these types information ,must be shared with government and public.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for sharing information, and your examples about researchers, businesses, and students are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion is unbalanced: most of the response explains the benefits of sharing, while the opposing view is addressed only briefly through the cancer-treatment example. That example does not explain why valuable information might reasonably be kept private, such as protecting commercial investment, patient confidentiality, or sensitive research. Your position is also not fully consistent: you support broad sharing, but the final example argues that important information should be shared with government and the public without clarifying any limits. Develop both views and state more precisely when information should or should not be shared.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic progression from research benefits to business, education, and a final point about valuable information. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these areas. However, the overall argument is difficult to follow because the first three paragraphs largely repeat the same benefit, and the opposing view is not developed as a distinct line of reasoning. Linking phrases such as “and also,” “where,” and “same like that” do not always show the relationship between ideas clearly. Some sentences are very long and contain several points without clear boundaries, particularly the opening paragraph. Organise the essay into a clear introduction, separate paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion, using more precise transitions and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “innovation,” “management,” “leadership qualities,” and “discovery,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “research,” “business,” and “particular topic.” Frequent spelling errors, including “scinetist,” “reasearcher,” and “opprtunity,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “share to much information” and “antibiotic of cancer.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “share research findings,” “conduct further research,” and “a treatment for cancer” to express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas using longer sentences and clauses, but control is limited, and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, “businessmen also apply these research on their company” has problems with the determiner, number, and sentence structure; “students has opportunity” also shows subject–verb agreement and missing article errors. The opening sentence runs through several ideas without a clear grammatical structure, while the business example contains a fragment beginning “suppose this information.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns or loosely joined clauses, so the range is restricted. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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