Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Information is used for making important Decisions. Few people think that it is good to share excess information as possible in research, business and the education world as this information can disturb the aim of work. others belive and I belive that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely where it could be the experience and tips and tricks which could help them in the life.This essay will not only discuss both views, but my opinion will also be highlighted in the conclusion.
On the one hand, sharing too much information in diffrent domains could make some possible problems which may effect the aim and context of the work. For instance if someone is teaching a history lesson which related to world wars if he tries to hightlight about any character while explaining the irrelevant theory could make a different views for student and may effect the overall reality of the topic.
On the other hand, sharing the information which is too essential or too valuable with others help them to understand the reality of the world. like a person from tech-realted industry if he tells the way to develop skills and building network could help them possibly get the job in his transition phase. Information related to finance like adive for investing the money in sip and mutual funds could help them to grow in future.
In conclusion, while I belive the sharing the essential information will help them to grow in the future and could possibly understand the present scenario.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You introduce both views and state a preference for sharing valuable information, with examples from teaching, technology and finance. However, the discussion only partly fulfils the task: the first view is explained mainly as a risk of irrelevant information distracting from a lesson, rather than why research, business or academic information might be too valuable to share freely. Your own position is also not fully developed, and the conclusion repeats the benefit of sharing without clearly weighing the opposing view. The response is 244 words, six words below the 250-word minimum; 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each side with a direct reason and a specific example, then explain why your position is stronger.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the two perspectives. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the history-teaching example does not connect convincingly to information being withheld, and the final paragraph does not bring the two views together. Some links are mechanical, while the opening promises that the opinion will be highlighted in the conclusion rather than presenting a clear position directly. Use topic sentences that state each argument, connect examples explicitly to that argument, and make the conclusion summarise both sides and your reasoned judgement.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “research,” “valuable,” “finance,” “investing” and “mutual funds,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “excess information,” “different views for student” and “in his transition phase.” Spelling errors, including “belive,” “diffrent” and “adive,” are noticeable and reduce precision. Aim for more exact language about the issue—for example, confidentiality, intellectual property and sharing research findings—and check spelling carefully. More accurate collocations would make your ideas easier to understand and help you express the distinction between useful knowledge and information that should remain protected.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if someone is teaching a history lesson,” and you use linking clauses such as “which could help them.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries and verb forms recur. For example, “sharing the information … help them” needs subject–verb agreement, while “if he tries … could make” lacks a clear main-clause subject. The opening also contains a sentence fragment after “as,” and “In conclusion, while I believe…” is left without a complete main clause. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and punctuation before adding further clauses.
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