Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Well knowledge is the key for humanity to succeed. The only thing that matters is knowledge and there is a saying "The best asset you could pass to your successor is knowledge". So, I think if there is only one thing in this world worth shareing it is knowledge. And the people who belive every information should be shared. There ground is as a human being we have the collective right to know information. And if knowledge is not shared it can not thrive to its peak. If only a little group of people have information then human civilization would stuck. The history of our civilization reflects that we came all this way with the support of brilliant minds from all over the world. If information and knowledge was not shared then it would not be possible. Though some people belive that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. It is because there are some knowledge that could be used in some harmfull manner. If an unethical person gets a hand on that info he/she could use it in a terrible way. But we don't know who is ethical and who is not. So we should keep a barrier and raise a bar that if an individual have knowledge of certain thing he/she can be eligible to gather information I mean we can keep a entry gate and set some regulations that if one has a minimum level of ethical knowledge he/she can get any information.

In conclusion I want to say we can set some condition and if one meets those they can have any information they want to learn.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a clear preference for sharing knowledge, and you do acknowledge the opposing concern that information could be used harmfully. The historical point about progress depending on contributions from “brilliant minds from all over the world” is relevant. However, the discussion remains general: the benefits of sharing are asserted rather than illustrated with a specific example, and the risks are not explored beyond unethical use. Your proposed “entry gate” and ethical-knowledge requirement are also unclear and do not explain how such rules would work. Develop both sides with concrete examples from science, business, or education, then state more precisely which information should be restricted and why. This would make the response address the task more fully and support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable sequence: it introduces the value of knowledge, considers the risk of misuse, and ends with a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Though” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, the ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, so the shift between the two views is not clearly organised. Several links are repetitive or awkward, including repeated use of “So,” and the sentence beginning “And the people who believe…” is not clearly connected to the preceding point. The final proposal also repeats the idea of setting conditions without clarifying it. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your position, and make each paragraph develop one main point with clear references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “human civilization,” “ethical,” “unethical,” and “regulations,” which helps communicate the central ideas. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “collective right” and “barrier.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, for example “knowledge…thrive to its peak,” “gets a hand on that info,” and “gather information.” Repetition of “knowledge” and “information” also reduces flexibility. Spelling errors such as “shareing,” “belive,” and “harmfull” are noticeable. Build a more precise academic vocabulary for discussing access, benefits, risks, and safeguards, and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences with subordinate clauses, such as “If an unethical person gets a hand on that info…” This shows an effort to express conditions and explain consequences. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. Examples include “And the people who believe every information should be shared,” which is an incomplete sentence, and “If only a little group of people have information then human civilization would stuck,” which has errors in agreement and verb form. Other problems include “there are some knowledge” and “if an individual have.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise complete sentence structures, subject–verb agreement, articles, and conditional forms, then proofread each sentence for a clear main clause.

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