Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is stated that, some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. However, in my opinion, while i believe, to share as much information around the world, it is not the most suitable option and it directly impact to the business and the academic world.

I widely believe, some information is too important and too valuable to be shared freely. So that, people can share inforamation as a limit. It is the best way to possible balance in every parts. However I can give some recent examples. First one is, many business have secret informations such as secret recipes, business ideaa, financial informations and other propeties informations. While, every small or large business have their own privacy. Not onlu that, but also, some secret informations are more better with hiden in the past. That is to say, in our country has ancient history. Also it has ancient treasure. So that's way it's more better to hide information in our country as well as the world.

On the other hand, some people say that it is good to share as much information as worldwide. It gets some benifit to others. Such as students, scientific research and up coming businesses. At the same time, some informations open many doors for future genaration. For example, someone can to share secret traditional recipes on social media platform. It will be help many people who interesting cooking. In addition people can sell valuable information to the business and the academic world. Such as, natural places informations, secret ingrediants, ancient places and study materials. So it will be help for many individulas in around the world.

In conclusion, some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Meanwhile I think, some information hve privacy. So those things should not shared freely. At the same time, some information are okay with shares as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both views and state a preference for protecting some information, so the response is relevant to the question. The examples of business recipes and financial information support the case for privacy, while students, research and future businesses are mentioned as beneficiaries of sharing. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening says sharing is unsuitable, whereas the conclusion allows that some information should be shared, without explaining the principle for deciding which. Several examples, such as ancient treasures and traditional recipes, are asserted rather than developed, and the benefits of sharing scientific or academic research are not explained in detail. Develop each side with a clear reason and a specific, relevant example, then state a consistent conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, which gives it a recognisable overall structure. Basic signposting such as “On the other hand” helps indicate a change of perspective. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking phrases are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate: “So that” does not connect the preceding idea correctly, while “First one is” and “At the same time” do not always show the relationship between points. The discussion also jumps from business secrets to ancient treasures without a clear bridge. Organise each body paragraph around one main claim, explain it, and then give a directly related example. Use referencing and transitions to show how each sentence follows from the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “financial information,” “privacy,” and “future generation,” so the reader can identify the subject of the discussion. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations, and spellings are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less clear. Examples include “secret informations,” “business ideaa,” “more better,” and “natural places informations.” Repetition of “information” and “share” also limits precision. Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing ownership and access, such as confidential data, intellectual property, public access, and research findings. Check spelling and whether nouns are countable; for example, “information” is generally uncountable and does not take a plural ending.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic complex structures, including “while” and “that is to say,” but the range is limited and these attempts are often faulty. Errors occur in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles, and prepositions. For example, “it directly impact to the business” has an incorrect verb form and pattern, while “some information hve privacy” lacks a suitable verb construction. “Someone can to share” also uses an incorrect verb form, and “those things should not shared freely” is missing an auxiliary. These errors recur and can make the reader pause, although the main ideas remain understandable. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking subject–verb agreement and complete verb phrases.

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