Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argue that sharing available infromation in scientific research, business and the education sector is beneficial. While others believe that few infromation is too crucial to be shared openly. This essay will discuss both the aspects of people, and in the last I will give my personal perspective.

On the one hand, sharing lots of data can improve the development rate of countries. Countries are in the developing phase, infromation is too important to grow well. The exchange of data between countries can reduce financial problem, and enhance probability for a success. For example, In 1990, scientist of Russia discovered spliting of atoms. In the future, this infromation helped the USA to create nucear power-plants. Nuclear-power plants cuts the excessive reliance on electricity and other bio-fuels. Consequently, Lots of resources are saved.

On the other hand, few information is too dangerous that have potenital to distroy the world that should not be shared to anyone. Information on the Wepons and poisions are too dangerous and valuable that can not be shared freely. Those information can be a serious threat to the man-kind. For example, the USA learned from Russia how nuclear weapons are created. After creating a nuclear weapon, the USA used against Japan in the war caused massive distruction.

In conclusion, sharing infromation is a good way for the development of the world although some infromation is too valuable to share freely because some people or country are unworthy of it and lead mass distruction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the debate and state a preference for sharing information while recognising that some knowledge should be restricted. The examples about nuclear power and weapons are relevant, but the explanation is under-developed and the historical claims are unclear: the account of Russian scientists discovering atom splitting and the USA learning how to make nuclear weapons needs greater accuracy and explanation. Your conclusion also introduces the idea that some people or countries are “unworthy” without supporting it. The response is 247 words, so it does not meet the required 250-word minimum. Develop your position more fully, explain the risks and benefits with precise examples, and make the conclusion follow clearly from your reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the contrast, and the main ideas are generally presented in a sensible order. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear. For instance, the link between sharing data, reducing financial problems, and the example of nuclear power is not fully explained. References such as “Those information” also make it harder to follow what is being discussed. The conclusion repeats the main contrast but adds a new judgement about people or countries being unworthy. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and ensure each paragraph develops one connected line of reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “development,” “exchange of data,” “nuclear power-plants,” and “serious threat,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including repeated misspellings of “information,” as well as “potenital,” “distroy,” and “distruction.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “enhance probability for a success” and “few information.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build accuracy with common academic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for the benefits and risks of sharing knowledge would also help you express your ideas with greater flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple sentences and longer structures, including “While others believe…” and the sentence beginning “although” in the conclusion. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or incomplete. “While others believe that few information is too crucial…” is a fragment, while “Nuclear-power plants cuts…” has a subject–verb agreement error. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence construction, as in “scientist of Russia discovered” and “the USA used against Japan in the war caused massive…” These errors can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise forming complete sentences and check agreement, articles, and clause connections when editing.

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