Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

nowadays, people believe that shared the information about business and academic world. However the shera the information is very important for a knowladge the this information help to pepole, and same thise information solve the problem and difficulty to each other.Such as the academic information regarding the studants, educational subject, project,exam related information help full to acadamic back grouns people and studans as well teachers also.

The topic about the information for business related so meny information hepl full and use full to businees and indusrty.

Information shearing the can helps people learn nwe thinks, new ideas adn develop his self thy are use this informantion dificult time. Shearing information each together the meak freindlt bonding in people. When you hepl to any person ,the next time he is also to you help as like the boanding.

nowadays so many company run a business and they are hepl to each other. same like so many institut and academi also shearing new study paln, exam patterns, new eductional methods like Ai. The most Recent example of Shearing information is COVID time, that time all world facing the bad time, but same country meak a COVID vacinetion. But who meak that vacinetion he provied information all country how to meak and ues. The this information shearing a is really hepl full.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You recognise that sharing information can support learning and cooperation, and the COVID-19 vaccine example is relevant. However, the response mainly argues in favour of sharing and does not explain the opposing view that some information may be too valuable or sensitive to release freely. Your own position is also not stated clearly as a direct answer to both sides. Examples about academic information and businesses are mentioned, but their benefits are not explained in enough detail. The response is 219 words, below the required 250, which limits the space available to develop the discussion. To improve, give each viewpoint its own developed paragraph, explain your opinion, and support each point with a specific reason or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: the response moves from general benefits of sharing to examples involving education, business and COVID-19. Paragraph breaks also separate some ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the two sides of the question are not clearly organised, and several points repeat the general claim that sharing is helpful. Linking phrases such as “However,” “Such as,” and “same like” do not always show the relationship between ideas accurately. Some sentences run together, making it hard to identify where one point ends and another begins. Use a clear structure—introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion—and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “academic information,” “educational methods,” “business,” and “COVID vaccine.” These choices show awareness of the subject, but the range is limited and several words are repeated, especially “information,” “help,” and “sharing.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “shera,” “knowladge,” “studants,” and “vacinetion,” make some phrases difficult to understand. There are also inaccurate word combinations, for example “information shearing” and “make a COVID vaccination.” Build a topic vocabulary set and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise expressions such as “share research findings,” “protect commercially sensitive data,” and “develop a vaccine” would help communicate the ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response contains some simple sentence patterns and attempts to connect ideas, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear in examples such as “people believe that shared the information” and “the this information help to pepole.” Agreement and articles are also problematic, as in “the sharing information … can helps people” and “same country make a COVID vaccination.” Several sentences lack clear boundaries or complete structures, which sometimes obscures the intended meaning. Practise forming accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add clauses with “because,” “although,” or “which.” For example: “Sharing research can help people develop new ideas, although companies may need to protect confidential information.”

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