Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individuals think that sharing too much information in scientific research, business and academics is good, while others believe that not every information is as important and only the most significant and valuable one should be shared. I believe that both views are right when applied in balance, if we look at the scientific research or any academic documents or papers, it should contain information other than the main ideas inorder to make it understandable to the reader.

In my opinion, scientific research and business-related documents must include information that is most important and relevant to the topic under discussion, while research papers contain details other than the main points but the discussion is mostly focused on the title under research. In the case of academics, including presentations, articles, books, it may include valuable details and information that's not too important but is helpful to some extent.

For example, I recently worked on an in-vivo scientific research project related to depression. After all the experimentation, I had to write a research paper in which I was asked to include all the details along with the significant data including the end results of the research. The details made it easier to understand the results that were valuable to the project. Also another example is of the presentations that we're provided it should have a balance of information. If it only includes the significant points it will be difficult to interpret so its always good to have other details and information that's not as valuable but supports in understanding the main points.

In conclusion, I don't fully agree with any one point of view

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a relevant position—that information should be shared in a balanced way—and support it with examples from research and presentations. The account of including experimental details alongside results helps explain why supporting information can be useful. However, the discussion only partly addresses the two views in the prompt. The argument for sharing information widely is not clearly developed, and the opposing concern about valuable or sensitive information is barely explained. Your opening also shifts the question toward whether information is important, rather than whether it should be shared freely. The conclusion, “I don't fully agree with any one point of view,” repeats your position but does not clarify the conditions or reasoning behind it. Develop both sides explicitly and state a more precise opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the examples generally relate to the central idea of balancing information. However, progression between the task’s two opposing views is not clear: the second paragraph focuses on what documents should contain, rather than setting out one view and then the other. Linking is also repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “also” and “for example,” while some references are unclear, as in “it should have a balance of information,” where the subject is not immediately clear. The final sentence feels abrupt and does not draw together the discussion. Organise the body around the two positions, use clearer references, and connect the conclusion to the reasons already presented.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main ideas, including “scientific research,” “significant data,” “end results,” and “interpret.” The example about an in-vivo project also shows an attempt to use more specialised language. However, the range is somewhat repetitive: “information,” “details,” “important,” and “valuable” recur frequently, limiting precision. Some word choices or combinations are awkward, such as “not every information” and “the title under research,” and “academics” is used broadly where a more specific term would help. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the overall message, but they make parts less natural. Build a wider set of precise terms for sharing, confidentiality, evidence, and supporting detail, and check whether nouns are countable and collocations sound natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If it only includes the significant points it will be difficult to interpret.” Most of the message remains understandable, but errors in sentence construction and punctuation recur. For example, the opening sentence joins several ideas without clear boundaries, and “Also another example is of the presentations that we're provided it should have a balance” contains a faulty clause structure. There are also errors in articles and agreement, as in “not every information,” and missing punctuation after introductory clauses. These issues sometimes make the reader work to follow the relationships between ideas. Practise separating long sentences, checking subject–verb agreement and articles, and punctuating conditional and introductory clauses.

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